Mist'd Memories

COLLABORATION~ Jack & Frieda

I still see you clearly through misty memories

feel that breath upon the nape of my neck,

warmth of ravish'd strength within my loins

your aura still renders me powerless 

buried deep in my heart, under my skin

when it rains in the spaces of my soul

I feel your tender caresses of yesterday 

Left of lonely storm cloud's simmering

in shadowed alleys of secret beliefs

touched skin and fingers softly, smoothly

outlining each sighed whisper and

contoured curve, stimulating senses

in breathless desires of your passion’d taste

and tantalizing heat as our bodies met

Our love story a wisp of an interlude 

wafting through my chamber'd heart

once our jazz played perfect harmony

the dance stopped playing our song

waltz'd to a beat of an off connection

of sad violin arias constantly screeching

without a chance at charm'd destiny

Portfolios wrap tear stained sheet music

drenched notes bleed, ink runs black streaks

piccolo puddles in high pitched weeping

applauding silent wing'd butterflies

in rhythm with distant thunder...crashing

rumbling in echoes of sorrow

and shattered heart ovations in the rain...

Author's Note

Reviews

[m.s.early]

You two combine sweetly and in warm embrace. You two compliment each other anyway and together is a divine union. Wonderful lamenting words capture the heart caught in yesterday.

"applauding silent wing'd butterflies
in rhythm with distant thunder...crashing" - incredibe imagery and the delicate wings in nature's violent booming contrasts paradoxically.

Great job guys.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much xavier, you picked my favorite lines too!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much X. We each write our own stanzas when we collaborate but you my friend have picked out the two lines that we shared. I was a bit lost on these lines and asked Frieda to help me, needless to say, she made it beautiful.

[MsJewel]

This is so incredibly beautiful - two master poets have created a masterpiece. Stunning in every way.
100/100 butterfly wings

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Awh, loving the butterfly wings Julie, thanks so much! :-)

[Poetic Beauty]

The comparisons are strong and it allows you to feel the rhythm of this union and when it starts to fall apart you can hear the screeching and the drums off beat. I loved the idea for this poem and the unique way you have spun this tale.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your glowing review PB, much appreciated.

[Eli Lane]

" when it rains in the spaces of my soul" love this line, as I have an artistic belief in spaces myself. I'm impressed, lovely poetry.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your visit and review Eli, glad you enjoyed our collaboration....spaces intrigue me too....

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

You both have a knack for making me solemn and excited at the same time, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

What a great compliment Thomas, thanks.

[Ruth]

When you two march together, it is a force to be reckoned with, beautiful collaboration...really is. I read this twice and was moved each time x

[Frieda P]

Thanks Poppy, so glad you enjoyed our collaboration. x

[Kimmie]

You're both very good at writing. Well done

[Justine]

I love how you use different types of music and instruments as metaphors for each stage of the relationship here - wonderfully creative. I think you two are the Fred and Ginger of collabs ! A love tragedy that left me wanting a sequel with a second chance ! I really enjoyed this and bravo to both of you. Justine

[Frieda P]

Thanks, I'm lovin' your review Justine.........! Oh...Fred & Ginger, I'll dance to that.

[Jack...]

Now I like Fred and Ginger even better...Frieda is so light on her pen, "I'll capture her heart singing, but wait until she gets a load of my dancing" ...Thanks so much Justine.

[Frieda P]

You're in rare form today Fred ;-)

[Jack...]

Yep, just got my tux out of the cleaners and I feel like a new man...have you seen my top hat anywhere hon?

[Frieda P]

You left it in the Batmobile me thinks.

[Jack...]

That's right, I was storing our 8-tracks in it.

[Rita L. Sev]

I love it when a poem offers imagery that s not only visual, but auditory and tactile as well. This piece engages all the senses beautifully. A successful write from the Dynamic Duo of Poetry!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for this glowing review Rita, I feel as though I should be wearing a cape whilst reading it. ;-) haha

[Jack...]

Holy Poetry Rita!!! Just something we whipped up while hanging out in the batcave. Thanks so much my friend...Dynamic Duo...I like like.

[Frieda P]

LOL, get the Batmobile ready will ya?

[Gleb Zavlanov]

I was so lost in the beauty of your words, I had to reread this. Once again, you have penned a fabulous write, rich with sweet and vivid imagery. Wonderfully penned!

[Frieda P]

Ahh you're too kind Gleb, thanks so much!

[Jack...]

Gleb, my friend...thank you. :)

[s y e]

I've said it before but you both do spectacular collaborations - you really compliment each other in your poems. I really loved all of it. The imagery is amazing.

Well done you two.

[Frieda P]

Thanks noodlebumble, lovin' the new avatar beautiful! xo

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my sweet young friend. Thrilled to see you smile here.

[s y e]

Thanks Frieda. :-)) And welcome to you both.

[Frieda P]

Look what the wind blew in ;-) x

[Jack...]

I think it was a zephyr...

[Frieda P]

Too funny, I was going to write that...ha

[s y e]

I agree with Jack....

[s y e]

It blew a couple leaves, nothing too important ;-)

[Jack...]

Maybe, but one of them sure was beautiful...

[s y e]

I know, Frieda is beautiful....!