'tween raindrops

'tween raindrops

A Poem by Frieda P

i yearn for you
   'tween raindrops
   silkiness
    of early morn's dew,
 spirit
    of twilight's mist
 dark cherry wine's
    intoxication
 & comforts 
    of a different rhyme
those spaces 
   that enchant musings
toxic perfum'd lacings
     air filled of metaphorical
blush'd smoke
    gasping for surrender
'tween honey'd breaths
         wafting in my mind 
  of nectar'd 
       burgundy enchantments


© 2014 Frieda P


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Great work as always, Frieda - such beautiful use of language and imagery!! "dark cherry wine's intoxication & comforts of a different rhyme" evokes a multitude of emotions and thoughts.

Somehow, I initially read "different rhyme" as "different time" when I first read it - perhaps that's what I had expected you to say. The line "air filled of metaphorical/blush'd smoke" is amazing too - I pictured a reddish-pink puff of smoke bursting in the air.

And one thing that makes your poems distinctly yours (as you probably know) is the 'ds at the end of certain words. Without your name on it, I still might say, "Must be a Frieda poem!" Wonderful and enjoyable to read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Huge smiles here, you made my morning Eric, thanks so much for your glowing review!



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Great read Frieda. Thanx for sharing

Posted 9 Years Ago


Great work as always, Frieda - such beautiful use of language and imagery!! "dark cherry wine's intoxication & comforts of a different rhyme" evokes a multitude of emotions and thoughts.

Somehow, I initially read "different rhyme" as "different time" when I first read it - perhaps that's what I had expected you to say. The line "air filled of metaphorical/blush'd smoke" is amazing too - I pictured a reddish-pink puff of smoke bursting in the air.

And one thing that makes your poems distinctly yours (as you probably know) is the 'ds at the end of certain words. Without your name on it, I still might say, "Must be a Frieda poem!" Wonderful and enjoyable to read.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Huge smiles here, you made my morning Eric, thanks so much for your glowing review!
"'tween honey'd breaths
wafting in my mind
of nectar'd
burgundy enchantments
Love this...... reminds me of the the winery down the street that makes wine from honey and fruit.
no grapes are used to make their wine and their honey and fruit wine is to die for.

What a wonderful poem.
Trace

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Sounds great, would go with my poem, cheers Trace, thanks so much.
Trace

10 Years Ago

Their honey mead and Bing cherry wine is so yummy
and their Summer Peach is for enjoying on so.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha yes you did, why does that not surprise me? ;-)
Sigh...scintallating and seductive...and all of those lovely S words. Lol... ;-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Sorry Red, don't know how I miSSed this one.... ;-) Grazie mille.
Smooth as silk and each word is like a whispered caress. You certainly know your way around sultry my friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Anne, sorry for late reply, the cafe has a problem with sending me alerts....
I feel like you're writing out a beautiful spell and it's coming true as you're writing it

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks again Eli, glad this one touched you....and if only. ;-)
Oooooooh! A romantic poem from Frieda. You always did do romance so well.

This is lovely Frieda. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Thanks noodles, so glad you enjoyed this one.........
Again, your romantic poetry is lovely! I feel like this poem could go on, and maybe you should add more to it! It feels like it gains momentum and then stops. I enjoyed it greatly, though! I absolutely adore the lines "air filled of metaphorical blush'd smoke..." it brings such a fantastic image of gasping for your lover, and dreaming of them all at once. Beautifully done!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha I'll speak to the muse about that...thanks, really thrilled you enjoyed this one Sarai!
Longing for somebody even when the moments that some regard as perfection loom above, and I particularly like the romantic aura I receive from this poem. As if these are lovers and you still yearn for him . . . interesting

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Frieda P

10 Years Ago

You read me perfectly Tai, so jazz'd you enjoyed this one, it's one of my favorites. Thanks so much.. read more
Your lover must be one lucky person...if you can write so well...I just wonder...I don't want to write anything more...I don't think I am good enough to review it

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Psssh nonsense, thanks for your kind words.

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