~if

If i trace'd upon your heartstrings, 

scripted sweet words in your name

captured moonbeams & butterflies spirit, 

if a poet's soul could ignite your essence

light the milky-way and make eyes glisten

would you be stargazing upon my face

if zest of living's experiences be captured in a word,

unfurling the mysteries of fantasies ginger

promising you eternity's sublime surrender

Would you stay to dance with me, just one more day....

Author's Note

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

if a poet's soul could ignite your essence
light the milky-way and make eyes glisten

Only if ...


loved the write !
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[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Anand !

[KeeD]

Frieda if I could write and talk like your poems, I'd be a prince and have any fine maiden in the land.. Seriously that's how your poems make me feel.. when I read them I feel like I can charm, I can woo, I can dream and I can love despite the odds.. the obstacles. You make a man dream like a little girl and that's not easy to do so kudos.. :P
And I swear let everyone else get jealous but I do stargaze upon your face when you review or write poems and it shows up on my news feed.. I even mouth it out loud :D that's Frieda!!

I can't dance, i'll probably make a fool of the both of us but lets go, hahaha! Cool write FP!

[Frieda P]

Oh Kee, your sweet words always make my heart sprout wings and want to fly...we can dance instead...thanks so much! And what are you tawkin bout, there's a girl in your pic?

p.s. I don't this talk this way in real life either. ;-)

[KeeD]

lol my little sister :D and oh please :P i'm sure you do, you charmer you.

[Frieda P]

Awh she's beautiful....

[m.s.early]

This piece reminds me of the wonderful ways words never cease to be arranged. This is a lovely mastery of our language and thank you for sharing it with us!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your glowing review and visit xavier.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Beauty seems to live at the tip of your pen, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Not always but thanks for your sweet sentiments Travis, you changed your avatar, I hardly recognized you.

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yea, decided to try a different pic. A friend of mine asked, why was i trying to be seductive with my pic? Lol

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Yea, decided to try a different pic. A friend of mine asked, why was i trying to be seductive with my pic? Lol

[Frieda P]

pssh do you always listen to your friends? ;-)

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Not usually lol... i thought it was poetic . haha but my opinion was outnumbered. lol

[Frieda P]

Was such said friend, male or female?

[Travis Gibson (poetic heroics)]

Two of my female friends.

[justjenn_2u]

To start off, I love the last line, the question asked after such vivid imagery throughout your piece. The poem is a powerful piece of literary text which explores the depth of love. I also enjoyed your method of linking sentences to paragraphs. Well done.

[Frieda P]

What a delightful review, thanks muchly jenn.

[justjenn_2u]

You are quite welcome!!!

[Frieda P]

:-) will be around to visit you again soon.

[justjenn_2u]

Same here. I look forward to it.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Good lord I am so jealous of your beautiful poetry Freida lol.You have a true gift with words:)

[Frieda P]

That made me smile, you're a sweetheart, thanks so much Vidya! :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are most welcome:)

[Praveeta]

I felt as if I was under the spell of this charming poetry. What a magical piece!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Praveeta, glad you enjoyed!

[Praveeta]

My pleasure creative poet.

[Frieda P]

You're sweet, thanks again.

[Tai Ryens]

Unrequited love can be quite a destructive thing, for both parties. One part of the relationship is more than willing to sacrifice himself just to see the twitch of a smile in his or her lover, and the other may come to regret failing to return the necessary attention needed to keep the obsession alive in the other, and a longing for the adulation felt during the relationship; this essence I see just plastered all over the lines of this piece.

Perhaps "if" I returned the love when I had it, they would still adore me to this day, and I oh, so long for that praise that I once felt, but it's far too late for anything to be changed because the person left.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your insightful review Tai, always an interesting take on my poetry.

[Leslie Philibert]

I agree with all the good reviews, this has a kind of mantra feelin` due to the excellent tempo...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Leslie, glad you enjoyed.

[redflutterby]

If~…

Its the word that lingers in our minds when we lose someone....if I had...if I could...
We long for the chance to go back and do or say the things that would keep them here if only for one more dance...its something all of us can relate too. Whether that person has passed away or is just missing from our life...we wish they would have stayed.

[Frieda P]

So true Red...if is a powerful word with much thought behind it, thanks for your thoughts here.

[icelandicblue]

Perfectly lovely Frieda. It almost feels a bit hypnotic. Your words weave together so magnificently. It is a truly beautiful piece of the heavens.

[Frieda P]

Now that I've got your under my spell Anne...ha, thanks muchy my friend.