~How shall I pen thee?

COLLABORATION ~ Frieda & Jack

How shall I pen thee, let me cipher the ways

pure bliss wafting on crystalline seascapes

ravishing the cerulean ripples of time's eye

deep and darkly ranges of mountainous clouds

devoured by eclipses of the moon's rage

 

lyrical verse of a rhythm’d release floating on

sweet chorded ventures in breath-taking time

sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered

 

 Waltzing on thin ice whilst reaching the stars

dancing under sunbursts crushing burn

you surrendered your heart within my hands

stepping outside reality's gated bridges

i'm flying loftily high on your script'd tunes

 

melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes

pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush

rose garden pastels on your lips…quivering

melodies of autumn leaf descent, lilting fantasies float,

resting within the crescendo of your love  

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tam Warink]

In every age there is a mechanic determinism that imposes itself upon the art and artist that abides in that sliver of time. It is as though lesser Vermeers have rallied in support of guilders and in so doing have provided bread to the sellers of minerals and oil - the ingredients that grind true art into a framed submission. Every painting has its flaws otherwise it would not be human. This is very human.

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[Frieda P]

Wow Tam, you've left me speechless, your review is poetry in motion, thanks from the bottom of my heart...muchly appreciated my sweet friend.

[icelandicblue]

I must say that was one of the most beautiful reviews I have read.

[Frieda P]

I so agree......

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I love this!! Good work both, and lovely working together like this!!! The start is a clever twist on what might otherwise be a familiar line. "Wafting on crystalline seascapes" is a great line and a powerful image. I love the word cerulean and ripples of time's eye is a very original idea! Sheet music love letters tossed to the deep!!! Wonderful. This is as full of great one-liners as some of Beck's songs on Odelay. Stepping outside reality's gated bridges...Fascinating. Pouring into us ALL, slowly, a very ethereal beauty that can be called nothing else but love.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Robby, I'm in love with your review, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration, muchly appreciated!

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I love the visuals you create together!

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Robby, Jack will be thrilled too.

[joshua sky]

I like the title to this. Oft times that is the burning question in attempting to string the right words together to make a necklace of language that could remotely reflect such poignant thoughts, feelings, ideas...Thank you, as always, for sharing your talents.

[Jack...]

Joshua., I'll say thank you since I am online. This poem was a collaboration between Frieda and myself.

[joshua sky]

Fantastic work. I will look for more collaborations from you guys as I peruse your respective works...:)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Human needs and reflections on it ...
"rose garden pastels on your lips" is a very unique way to convey this to another.
Lovely words stranded together inside this.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Josie, glad you enjoyed our collaboration.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Your welcome, Frieda and jack, too!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Josie.

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Always enjoyed!

[Cassie]

Ohh my!!!!! live long to collaborate my dear friends Frieda and Jack, you two work well and you bring out the best. I totally enjoyed this. Wow!!!! I am rereading and rereading. Now tucked in my library

[Frieda P]

Wow to you, thanks for this glowing review Cassie!!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sunshine

[Justine]

Your friend, Jack, added this to my review requests and I am so pleased he did as it's a beautiful poem. Delicate metaphor like "ravishing the cerulean ripples of time's eye" and "Waltzing on thin ice whilst reaching the stars" are a pure delight to read. I must read more of your poetry as I enjoyed it so much :) Justine

[Frieda P]

I'm so glad he did too Justine, thanks for your gracious review :-)

[Jack...]

Thank you Justine for your kindness

[Tadej]

This is incredible. I love everything about it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tadej.

[Ahena MK]

Beautifully composed... And awesome review Tom....
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Ahena

[Frieda P]

Thanks, muchly appreciated, glad you enjoyed our collaboration Ahena.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[Coyote Poetry]

I love your new poetry. It is balanced and filled with life and positive energy. I had to read again for the pleasure of the words.
"Waltzing on thin ice whilst reaching the stars
dancing under sunbursts crushing burn
you surrendered your heart within my hands
stepping outside reality's gated bridges
i'm flying loftily high on your script'd tunes"
The above lines are amazing. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

I'm thrilled by your review Coyote, thanks so much.

[Tom]

These two brushes combined together paint a sublimely worded, image intensifying masterpiece on the canvas !

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your glowing review Tom, muchly appreciated!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Tom.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well you know you can pen me anytime darling, a touching and highly extrovert piece, well done.

[Frieda P]

Hmm, it'd have to be very colorful Thomas ;-) Thanks.........