~How shall I pen thee?

COLLABORATION ~ Frieda & Jack

How shall I pen thee, let me cipher the ways

pure bliss wafting on crystalline seascapes

ravishing the cerulean ripples of time's eye

deep and darkly ranges of mountainous clouds

devoured by eclipses of the moon's rage

 

lyrical verse of a rhythm’d release floating on

sweet chorded ventures in breath-taking time

sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered

 

 Waltzing on thin ice whilst reaching the stars

dancing under sunbursts crushing burn

you surrendered your heart within my hands

stepping outside reality's gated bridges

i'm flying loftily high on your script'd tunes

 

melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes

pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush

rose garden pastels on your lips…quivering

melodies of autumn leaf descent, lilting fantasies float,

resting within the crescendo of your love  

Author's Note

Reviews

[Tam Warink]

In every age there is a mechanic determinism that imposes itself upon the art and artist that abides in that sliver of time. It is as though lesser Vermeers have rallied in support of guilders and in so doing have provided bread to the sellers of minerals and oil - the ingredients that grind true art into a framed submission. Every painting has its flaws otherwise it would not be human. This is very human.

100 pearl earrings

[Frieda P]

Wow Tam, you've left me speechless, your review is poetry in motion, thanks from the bottom of my heart...muchly appreciated my sweet friend.

[icelandicblue]

I must say that was one of the most beautiful reviews I have read.

[Frieda P]

I so agree......

[adornoscousin]

I have been rereading Shakespeare and this was a nice reformulation of it. I love the line about stepping out side or reality.

[Fay Slimm]

An amazing collab. by two serious writers and filled with sensual imagery this has to be read again and again........ well done indeed.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Freida P,
"How shall I pen thee?"
This poem was a lovly gem to behold. I read it through once then as an effort to fathom it as two poems (read again.)
I found it quite amazing! I have not had the pleasure of responding to another's words, line upon line as this is.
This little part was really neat! "Sheet music love letters tossed to the deep." and... "tangerine promises whispered."
Thankyou for writeing this; it was a lesson to me of what two can do together.
Blessings,
Kathy.
Ps I have not read your writing before and got this idea from my pages "poems you might like" suggestion.

[barleygirl]

Sometimes a tumble of imagery like this can seemingly have no recognizable message for me, but I'm happy to say that I'm following your thread, despite the heavily nuanced writing. Every image is well stated & all are woven together nicely, full of contrasts & dynamics -- not a still painting, but like watching a film in motion. Good job.

[stars are far]

wow..thats very GREAT..it remined me of Elizabeth Browning's poem "how do i love thee" i dunno why..but that is my poem..
so yeah your poem is amazing..

[Traci]

How did I miss this collaboration by two of my favorites?
Truly another favorite to add to my collection.
Wonderful job you two....every line is brilliantly penned.
100/100

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

WOW this is one of your best pieces it is m y favorite.
I will be reading this again.
I love these lines. don't be surprised if this inspires me
and I write a poem every thing Inspires me pretty much
thank you for sharing. this just took my Breath away.
I am a Romantic so I love romance and love writes. blessings nice work

lyrical verse of a rhythm’d release floating on

sweet chorded ventures in breath-taking time

sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered


melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes

pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush

rose garden pastels on your lips…quivering

melodies of autumn leaf descent,

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed this one, but I can't take all the credit, it's a collaboration with Jack, if you haven't read him already, you must, he's the true consummate romance poet.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

What's his name on here? I will thank you my friend. Blessings

[Frieda P]

It's Jack...just Jack actually. You should be able to find him easily, if not I can send you a link...I'm sure you'll enjoy his poetry.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

ok let me try if not will let you know thank you. Blessing

[KlineXcreed]

This is a gorgeous and a well written piece of art. Thanks for sharing!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed our collaboration!

[luviva]

sheet music love letters tossed to the deep

sandcastle dream waves now captured

in sunset wisdom, tangerine promises whispered

the best lines... who can forget the music of a burgeoning love? who can forget the promises made in the first few days?? who can forget the moments spent in the evrgreens on summernights watching the sunset??
ehhh nice poem!! continue the penning my lady

[Frieda P]

Can't take all the credit here, those lines are Jack's, so thrilled you enjoyed our collaboration.

[luviva]

ohh well it was a beautiful peice...
thats all i know

[Frieda P]

Ahh thank you again, I think we work well together, and Jack will be thrilled...

[MsJewel]

melting, moon beam reflections in your eyes
pouring into me, slowly, sweetly as I blush
wow! A verse I wish I had written.

You have created some beautiful images and emotions. A gorgeous collaboration by two awesome poets!

:) Julie

100/100 moonbeams

[Frieda P]

Woo, 100 moonbeams, doesn't get much better than that, thanks Julie! :-)