~Ice Cream Clouds

you nuzzled your head 

unto the shoulder of my soul

tears streamed into my heart

steamy moments of resolution

lingering breaths of quivering whispers

stolen moments of life's endurance

wafting through  athanasia's elusion'd moondust

dreams of uninvited icy cloudbursts

plunging wing'd poetry into posterity

remembering future's sacred pinings

like fire gasping under waterfall's torrents

i wished upon a snowflake before it took flight

   appease this illusion yet one more night

Author's Note

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

yin and yang ... conflict ... love the title ...i get lost in the pic and "Clouds" is an absolute favorite of mine ... was privileged to hear Ms. Joni Mitchell several times waaaaay back when hippies danced :)
i am plunged instantly into warmth and comfort then pushed deeper ... finding the reality of relationship ...then the magic ...and again reality ... killer last two lines and making them rhyme punctuates the dream ... beautiful poem dear Frieda ... its 5 am and you move me to be falling in love again ..no matter the cost :) Happy New Year for sure!
E.

[Frieda P]

I've missed you heaps E, jazzed to see you on my page my sweet friend, thanks! Happy New Year to you and yours. :-)

[SAYED THANGAL]

very beautiful narration, ''shoulder of my soul'' , a good expression, a combination of abstract with concrete, as whole , it can be seen in the poem, good writing
sayed thangal, India

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the visit and review Sayed, much appreciated.

[Lyn Anderson]

What a beautiful piece with great imagery. Glad I stopped by.

[Frieda P]

I'm jazzed you did too, thanks KL.

[00000000000000000000000..]

Frieda that was beautiful:)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Jon. :-)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Your welcome Frieda :)

[NeiL ArandA]

Love the song . Such poet like you are hard to come by . You have away with words too deep for me to even grasp .

[Frieda P]

I really appreciate your kind words, you flatter me Neil, thanks muchly.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wonderful metaphor here...I agree with lydi...

there was such a gaping hole in the café while you were gone...

really magical words you write.

jacob

[Frieda P]

You're too kind jacob, thanks so much.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The first half of the poem seemed to have a different voice than the second half (for me). It's almost as if you started speaking, lifted your head into the clouds, and started writing in sky. The overall feel is magical and beautifully and wonderfully alight.

[Frieda P]

You noticed that too huh? My muse likes to mess with me sometimes and I just let her rip, thanks muchly Linda.............

[MsJewel]

Dreamy and magical Frieda, a beautiful poem of reflection as light and sweet as those ice cream clouds. Happy New Year and welcome back.

Hugs, Julie

[Frieda P]

Jazzed you enjoyed Julie and thanks...........squishy hug back atcha. xo

[Just Jayren]

This is really impressive... You manage to capture the entity of what it is for a human to feel... (To me) the picture isn't needed as the words do all the speaking here.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Jayren, I do love my pics....jazzed you enjoyed.

[Rod Dangers]

You have an awesome vocabulary and i really enjoy the images you conjure from your words. Well written. Thanks for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Rod, appreciate the read and review.

[David Scott]

I enjoyed do many lines here Frieda!
The title fooled me a little. I was expecting a overly sweet dripping ice cream cone. Ha.

What the poem gave me was a seven course meal of textured delights.
Like a great chef, you blended spicy with sweet, you mixed bitterness with tangy joys.
The fire within a waterfall was my favorite thought. I also enjoyed the final thought as the poem drifted off like a snowflake in an updraft...

Complex and lovely. Elegant and delicious for the soul.
Glad your back!

[Frieda P]

Holy, glad you were able to whet your appetite on this one Scott....need a napkin? :-) Thanks so much!