Last Sigh

....but a teardrop in your essence

that sense will always disquiet

 took my breath away when you took yours

always a flutterby yearning in your flight

  you float with the angels heralding peace

a promise to proclaim faith in all begrud'd

  your last word, 'be kind in my absence'

written in the blood of all mankind

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

This was so sad and heartbreaking when you hear the last words of our dying beloved ones which we will never forget for it is etched in our memories forever. You are kind and you have been that continuously ever since...Thank you for sharing this sad write...:)............

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kind words and support always my friend, as you know this one was written in blood tears....x

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)...........

[ANTO]

I had a lump in my throat at the title Frieda. The content was no less impactful.

[Vani Jalagar]

"your last word, 'be kind in my absence'
written in the blood of all mankind"
this is so painful......we say "even though you aren't there ,I can live with memories" this really impossible to do so...there are many things to look at and move further...but life wont be that normal.
good 1 :)

[MsJewel]

Frieda, I can't even imagine the loss that you feel. Your poem is heartfelt and touching and has left me teary eyed.

:) Julie

[Joyce S. Greene]

Extremely sad, your poem sings of your tragic loss and of how deeply that loss touched your soul, Frieda. I pray that your sister is now at peace and no longer "a flutterby yearning in your (her) flight" and that you have also achieved a measure of peace in knowing that "you (she) float (s) with the angels." My heart goes out to you Frieda. You have written a very beautiful tribute for her.

[Rosaria_V]

All I can say was that was very beautiful :) it was heartbreaking but wow

[TL Boehm]

be kind in my absence - written in the blood of all mankind. this statement just tears at the soul. Amazing write.

[Tate Morgan]

Deeper than your usual stuff I like the music

[Tai Ryens]

The illusion of co-dependence introduces itself, when it was, in fact, only a one-sided addiction taking place; much so that you went as far to exclude yourself from the necessity of breath in order to grow dependent on the lover's sigh. I feel myself even more connected to the piece by the mention of the last words (not line): "'be kind in my absence.'"
It reflects a similar concept sung by Leighton Antelman (of Lydia) in the song "Her and Haley." The song lyric itself goes as so: "Stay safe and you'll be fine," which I immediately thought of upon reading the line, since it could lean alike to the concept you've presented here.

What really took my breath, however, is the possibility this could be a stab (depending on how you look at it) to religion by possibly referencing a divine deity leaving humanity to fend off on its own, hence the last words. The similarities are there, such as the being among angels or the idea that humanity itself is dependent on a god or the reclaiming of faith or the fact that its last words are etched into human blood, possibly shed.

The precise aura of the piece remains a mystery, but what is common among all is the unrequited addiction to a person or idol, a concept that I hold dear to my heart. Well done, Frieda, well done indeed.

[WatcherInSilence]

Heartbreaking, emotional and truthful...everything a great poem should have

[Lifeofbennard]

Very sad but there is beauty in the sincerity of emotion. Keep writing :)