'Still'...

If the sun were to set in your eyes

as the moon settled over my soul 

falling to the depths of an ocean's mile

I'd 'still' remember how you made me feel

& everyday that ends in why I'll miss you

Reviews

[Jack...]

Five lines...that's all it took for you to touch my heart with this poem. We all miss people and it affects all of us in different ways...but when the missing is constant and how they made you feel is only found in memories, then the sadness is a pain we only wish we could miss. Frieda, you are an amazing poet and I am so thrilled I have the opportunity to read you and call you friend.

[Frieda P]

You've truly touched my heart, this one apparently wrote itself, I had a high temp and when I awoke, it was sitting in my notepad, obviously never far from my mind, thanks for your kind heart and being such a good friend always Jack...x

[N!LoC]

beautiful words.... put simply beautifully...

[Ayvid N]

This poem reminds me that true love is unconditional. If one has to live with the lonliness and grief left in its wake... then so be it, because it is better to have loved than not at all.

And you are the masterful poetess who made me think these thoughts with this extremely beautiful poetry. You deserve every applause, every accolade that comes your way, Poetess Numero Uno!

[WithLoveandLoss.]

Without a syllable of fiction, I couldn't help but let out a good cry. With this and many, many other contributions to a past broken love I needed someone to say its okay to miss, to long for another. Jack is right, 5 lines...that's all it takes. Thank you for more than penning, but for understanding and solacing.

[annabellee]

Simply beautiful. Also loved the butterflies...
I will add it to my favourites, I loved it :)

[Jitender Kaur]

its a beautiful and touching poem...

[David Scott]

I like the shadowed butterfly...
The poem conveys deep meaning with just a few words.
This is a special kind of friendship.

[Baby Ricochet]

Smooth. Even beautiful. Outstanding work Frieda

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You always steal my heart, Friedalicious... I'm torn by this heartache... a constant reminder that pain is beautiful too.
Lovely write.~xoxo~

[MsJewel]

So much love in so few words...There are those that we never will stop missing... Your poem touched my heart Frieda.

:) Julie

[Johanna]

Really touching and beautiful, loveely job!