'Still'...

If the sun were to set in your eyes

as the moon settled over my soul 

falling to the depths of an ocean's mile

I'd 'still' remember how you made me feel

& everyday that ends in why I'll miss you

Reviews

[Jack...]

Five lines...that's all it took for you to touch my heart with this poem. We all miss people and it affects all of us in different ways...but when the missing is constant and how they made you feel is only found in memories, then the sadness is a pain we only wish we could miss. Frieda, you are an amazing poet and I am so thrilled I have the opportunity to read you and call you friend.

[Frieda P]

You've truly touched my heart, this one apparently wrote itself, I had a high temp and when I awoke, it was sitting in my notepad, obviously never far from my mind, thanks for your kind heart and being such a good friend always Jack...x

[ANTO]

'Everyday that ends in Why..." - the simplicity speaks volumes here Frieda. Gorgeous poem from a gorgeous soul.

[cartera]

So sad, yet it has a contented feel to it. Moon settling over the soul is inspired.
ATB

[Anita Singh]

I'd "still" remember how you made me feel
& everyday that ends in why I'll miss you..
No matter how much time has passed or how many seasons have come and gone. The word "still" holds so much emotions. I loved this piece!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much annabella, this one holds a special place in my heart, glad you enjoyed.

[Misery]

forever with you ... unseen and unheard ... always deeply felt

[J. Kell]

So beautiful in it's message and simplicity Frieda! It's hard losing those we love either by circumstances or death. Great poem.

[Renée]

Nicely Done...No matter what keeps us apart... loved ones are always held within our hearts..

[ron]

What a wonderful poem Freida. Makes me believe there is out there. thank you.

[Sheila Kline]

Sweet Frieda, you have a way of touching the heart and soul that allows the emotions you express to drift down on the wings of the butterflies as we sigh and take in the sadness you carry in your heart. The sun and moon covers the whole of it! It is there 24/7!
Beautiful!!

[Vani Jalagar]

Sweet as you.........what else can I say :)
awe-struck :)

[luviva]

oh so sweet and you know what,
i got confess i envy you.. jokes
but your imagination and art is non comprehend-able.
not only in writing but also the way you portray your writes.