Facade of Living

I wonder why they can't SEE clearly when

everything's been written in terminal code

Dead, long before that last breath of life

was snuffed, inhaling just for show

hanging in the shadows for years, not hours

buried under the rubble long before the avalanche

no one noticed the earth was shifting, or

they ignored the quietude of pleading screams

 beneath breathing's precious facade of living 

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

My dear, you've made a habit of writing things that just strike me to the bone. This piece is highly reflective about a lot of things that have been on my mind for the last while. You just have a way of expressing these things that is unparalleled. Awesome work as always :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Benji, sorry you can relate my friend, jazzed you enjoyed :-)

[kublakhan27]

Anytime Mrs.R :)

[DrD]

We are born alone and solve the mystery of death alone and everything between is like we are alone. You captured this sentiment very well and there are those times when the chaos of life eats us alive and no one notices or cares. Very well done, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Cares or notices, I often wonder which it is....thanks Dave.

[Joyce S. Greene]

How very sad, Frieda. Excellently written, it cried out to me and made me feel the pain of that girl's half-life.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Joyce, glad you felt this one.

[Rebecca Buller]

"...under breathing's precious facade of living."

That's such a powerful line that tugs at one's soul, Frieda. Wonderful job:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rebecca! :-)

[B-poet]

A deeply profound & powerful theme you've conveyed here Frieda. Great work. A compelling read. :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks B, jazzed you enjoyed. :-)

[SyberRose]

Powerful and emotive words Frieda... thank you for posting and glad to see you are back...:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rose, not gone, just resting, that flu bug is the pits... :-)

[SyberRose]

I take it you hadn't got your vaccine yet...I better get mine soon before I get it.

[Dr. Wood ?]

whoa
I understand this
Must clean my glasses more often
Ha
It paints a sorry picture that is all too common in this 'MODERN' world
Your voice sings with pain at the apathy and ignorance of those faceless excuses for human beings who can ignore the old, and at the same time deny their future

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille doc, love your insightful reivew....

[Angel]

I will sit, sometimes, watching people walking past...
And I wonder, as I watch...what is inside each of them? What secrets might they be holding deep inside...what trauma...or what horrid guilt? Perhaps that blonde, with her too tight, too revealing clothes...perhaps she is an abused wife. Or maybe that quiet little brunette is the victim of bullies at school. Or, maybe that sweet looking woman is planning to poison her husband. We don't know, do we? Perhaps we have walked beside murderers, and not known it.
Then, again, maybe they are all just normal men and women, going about their business on a normal day...and wondering...
Who is that freaky old lady, sitting there, watching people walking by??

[Frieda P]

Ha I do that all the time too Angel, my girlfriend and I used to make up entire history's for some people, you just never know though, do you, thanks.

[Pryde Foltz]

no one noticed the earth was shifting, or
they ignored the quietude of pleading screams
under breathing's precious facade of living

So powerful and apt for many. Another beautiful write.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pryde, took me ten minutes to get back here, I see everything is apropos on this site....

[Sami Khalil]

"buried under the rubble long before the avalanche

no one noticed the earth was shifting, or

they ignored the quietude of pleading screams"

A very sad and heartfelt poem. Injustice can bury so many people under its rubble while onlookers don't notice or make fun of us. There is A God that hear our screams and will take justice for us if they get away with it on Earth...Glad to see you back...:>)......

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sami, 'injustice' being the key word here....

[Sami Khalil]

Wow...Good to know ...You are welcome...:>)