After submergence...

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Survivors astray in the ocean, you having pulled close to rescue the loner now learned the tragedy of your mistake: that despite the calm demeanor, a person is still capable of ripping apart a titanium boat to shreds. What entices me is that you wished to be split open, as you knew your vessel contained precious cargo... Yet the initial damage inflicted by tearing apart the vessel rendered it incapable of floatation, which resulted in the treasure sinking and you realizing the person was not human, but a creature that thrived off the mercy of venturers such as you. But, the creature made the decision to linger among the debris.. and you, as the victim in need of help, only look upon the one responsible with indifference, hence the deep breath. Perhaps you expected it because you ventured so cluelessly into dangerous waters.. or perhaps you expected retribution for past sins. How compelling.. How enticing.. How poignant.. I quite enjoyed this, and the complex tale told in between the lines of the poem.

[Frieda P]

I quite enjoyed reading your review Tai...always a pleasure to have you on my page.

[Eddie Phillips]

Can you get anymore better? I loved this and I read it twice because i loved it so much. Thanks for sharing it.

[Barbara Walker]

It's very intriguing when they stick around. You want to investigate further, but a part of you would almost rather remain in the dark, so as not to get disappointed.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Impressive imagery. I can relate very well to this poem. :)

[annie lee]

Very beautiful and sad, but thoughtful and perceptive too. You explore the twisting, tortured paths of human emotion and tragedy so expertly with empathetic, expert, lyrical verse. It is stunning.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A sad yet powerfully angry and defiant piece told in your eloquent prose my Lady!

[Frieda P]

Thanks John!

[kublakhan27]

This is brilliant, a perfect poem really. I wish I wrote like this. Phenomenal work here my dear, I don't even have a review for it. Everyone has pretty much covered everything ;P

[Frieda P]

I'll take it Benji, thanks so much my sweet friend. :-)

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure love :)

[Tom]

Perhaps a cool exterior but break the surface if you dare and within the deep chasms, somewhere if you persevere, you'll find a warm, forgiving heart !

Deep and soulfully penned with no frills attached, splendid Frieda !

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tom, glad you enjoyed!

[MsJewel]

Frieda, You never cease to amaze me with the beauty of your poetry. You have touched my heart again with a stunning poem - so many lines worth remembering - this is going in my favorites.

:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Oh thanks so much for both Julie, muchly appreciated. :-)

[Strider Marcus Jones]

Floating, then drowning but still floating and surviving. Excellent poem. 100/100

[Frieda P]

Thanks Strider, jazzed you enjoyed.