~Stormy Weather

caught in the eye of stormy destruction 

somwehere 'tween here and there

momma said 'don't hang with that boy'

storm chasers called it,

moral turptitude category 3,

uprooted with bombastic force

thrown like a ragdoll,    landed in 

the debris of indifference

told to vacate,    instead stuck it out

life rafts were at the ready

I prefer the slow death of drowning

  slipped off the pier of 

cognizant

    swallowed deeply my intuition

     took a swan dive off intellect

       landed in a den of iniquity

         sinking in muck of broken promises

            they buried me at sea,

               along side common sense    

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

I think Fema will rescue you along with the national guard. I love the analogy between love and the weather or in this case a Tornado of F3 . I thought you were going to go all out with F5 which is utter destruction...Lol
A splendid poem and very creative...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha Sami, F5 is reserved for real life and my spelling today! lol Thanks muchly :--)

[Sami Khalil]

Hahaha. So true...You are welcome muchly...:)

[Angel]

Very cool analogy...and quite apt.
Intelligent, and moving.
Genius...

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Angel....x

[wordwarrior]

Wow, this is deeply clever and so well penned. That metaphor of the storm is wonderful. This whole poem is extremely creative!

[Frieda P]

So jazzed you enjoyed this one wordwarrior since I had second thoughts about it, thanks so much!

[Pryde Foltz]

I prefer the slow death of drowning
slipped off the pier of cognizant
swallowed deeply my intuition
took a swan dive off intellect
landed in a den of iniquity
sinking in muck of broken promises
they buried me at sea,
along side common sense

Brava....but my aren't you brave.

[Frieda P]

Hardly brave Pryde, just a silly woman who can be really stupid at times, thanks so much my friend.

[Pryde Foltz]

Oh no, Frieda, I just don't think that is true. Brave and beautiful; your poetry stands as a testament.

[Frieda P]

You're a dear, I really appreciate the sentiment Pryde....

[Pryde Foltz]

I do mean it.

[MikeV]

One of my many favorites of yours :)
Then you threw in eminem, aww stop it some more ;)

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Mike, now I take it back...ha, you know I like Marshall too ;-)

[MikeV]

Because of your poem, which caused my review
it inspired me to write a poem, I'm going to call it "stop it some more"
:)
my friend, your poem is going into my favs, as soon as my phone lets me :)

[MikeV]

As soon as i read your poem i knew the connection with the song
this is what happens when a "volcano hits a tornado"

[Frieda P]

Ha are you smoking that funny stuff again my friend? Actually sounds good, I'll be waiting for it....

[MikeV]

Lol wacky tabbacky? Nah not for like an hour ;)

[SyberRose]

Very creative and always insightful Frieda...a stupendous write...Rose:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rose, I think that's my first stupendous :-)

[TL Boehm]

buried at sea alongside common sense. Sheesh. I think I'm buried there too but for a different reason.

[Frieda P]

We each have our own stories but end up in the drink all the same, thanks Tam.

[Tarry Franck]

Very creative Frieda - loved it :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Tarry :-)

[Tarry Franck]

My pleasure

[Essa G]

Really deep poem. Love the meaning behind it! Great poem, as usual!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Essa, jazzed you enjoyed!

[Dr. Wood ?]

wot jack said

How lazy am I?????

[Frieda P]

Hmmm you know what your next review is going to say, right? Payback's a b***h ;-P

[Dr. Wood ?]

Give me a break please...us fragile Brits need some space after driving so far.....I must admit that I run out of superlatives when I read your work and my word power is limited compared to most on here....YOU KNOW that this poem was outstanding.....And I am a lousy reviewer unless I can have a joke....I promise to do better next time....OOPS...I already reviewed a next time

[Frieda P]

I don't get mad doc, I get even. ;-P Kidding of course...perhaps.

[Dr. Wood ?]

now you got me scared.....Me pen is shaking yet me hand is still......the room's adopted an uneasy chill.....the curtains flap and the moon stares in...her face is wearing a gruesome grin....Maybe I shouldn't have had that pint of Anstel in the pub....

[Frieda P]

Ha now who is you said can't review??

[Emerald Seas]

Love the storm references - cool way you've wrapped it all together into this well crafted tale. Your imagination and creativity never cease to amaze me.

[Frieda P]

You're too good to me Sirrah, thanks muchly my sweet friend!