~Swim in You~

I fell for you like amber raindrops

burnished by the sun's satiation,

golden in my heart you will remain

our love story as sinister storm clouds,

turning sapphire skies to bleak trickles

sank in drowning pools of our own undoing

  baubles of lust dissipated on the horizon 

     yet I still swim in you on dismal days... 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Frieda - Now we can agree with the font and theme here in the lines...I miss reading all of you guys as of late...the music like YB I just read...gives to this verse...Good to read your work…Thanks for the invite to read your thoughts to paper at Writers Café...I'm back to work with copy writer and doing my best to write 1000 words a day...and a subject you do not get to choose...will be busy the next few months...so I will read all RR"s might just take a bit longer to get a review...hope you understand...plus promote my book: The Onyx - Vena Amoris...for late next month release…I have very little time on my hands…making the most of everyday and taking today to read as many as I can…keep writing and sharing your creative talent here and elsewhere…

[Frieda P]

Finally you like one of the fonts I picked, it's about time, thanks for stopping and good luck with your project.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I just commented on one I did not like the font...hehehe...I'm heading to bed...I did as many as I could review tonight...Good night...Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks again, have a good sleep Glen.

[Stevo The POE-t]

Really great job here... I really enjoyed reading it... Thanks for sharing...

[Frieda P]

Jazzed you enjoyed this one Stevo, thanks muchly....

[Trace]

Very nice, short and to the point. Like this. trace

[Frieda P]

Thanks Trace.

[Michael G. Smith]

Reminds of those brief seconds we stop and ponder a past life of "what could have beens".

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mike.

[Ohhhwillow]

Firstly - amazing title girly. This is one for my library Frieda, I am forever taken aback by your way with words. Your ability to use the images around you and mould them to suit your complex feelings is breathtaking. I was trying to find one particular line to quote back to you - I couldn't. I was overwhelmed with the intensity of this write. Beautiful write Frieda

[Frieda P]

You humble me with your words Willow, thanks so much.

[Angel]

Love...or is it lust...that gathers like a summer storm...the storm breaks, lightning flashes, we are caught, helpless in it's grip...but then, the skies begin to clear, and the storm dissipates, till finally it is just a cold drizzle...
Yep...
You have written it beautifully...classic Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Such a poetic response Angel, thanks muchly!

[Angel]

0;-D..................

[Lydia Shutter]

The imagery in this one is spectacular, Frieda. Why do we always want the ones who are bad for us? Maybe if we work for it, we appreciate it more? Sinister storm clouds can still drench us with sensual rain. I liked this a lot. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

I have no clue Lydi, if you figure it out, please let me know...thanks so much.

[Lydia Shutter]

Just human nature unfortunately.....we always want what is bad for us. Have a good day today, Frieda.

[S C]

Thoughtful and short and sweet.

I enjoyed this.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sera, glad you enjoyed this one...

[Ken Simm.]

This is a web of a poem. It spans so many emotions in a real love story

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Ken.

[Einstein Noodle]

i think this is very intricate, interwoven...with many stories and fireworks going off between the lines. i think the first two lines are particularly brilliant...integrating circles of nature ...the sun soaks up the water...burnishes it and lets it fall...lust burns out but leaves a cycle of memories ... almost haunted longing...love love love this....incredible story you have told in a wonderful short space...nice job thinks i..
E.

[Frieda P]

I love how you dissected my web here E...thanks so much for your insightful and gracious review!

[Infinite hexes]

A really nice prose - short and thoughtful. Your title though, doesn't match the creativeness of your poem, but it gives the whole point of the poem.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Heaven, any suggestions?