~Swim in You~

I fell for you like amber raindrops

burnished by the sun's satiation,

golden in my heart you will remain

our love story as sinister storm clouds,

turning sapphire skies to bleak trickles

sank in drowning pools of our own undoing

  baubles of lust dissipated on the horizon 

     yet I still swim in you on dismal days... 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Frieda - Now we can agree with the font and theme here in the lines...I miss reading all of you guys as of late...the music like YB I just read...gives to this verse...Good to read your work…Thanks for the invite to read your thoughts to paper at Writers Café...I'm back to work with copy writer and doing my best to write 1000 words a day...and a subject you do not get to choose...will be busy the next few months...so I will read all RR"s might just take a bit longer to get a review...hope you understand...plus promote my book: The Onyx - Vena Amoris...for late next month release…I have very little time on my hands…making the most of everyday and taking today to read as many as I can…keep writing and sharing your creative talent here and elsewhere…

[Frieda P]

Finally you like one of the fonts I picked, it's about time, thanks for stopping and good luck with your project.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I just commented on one I did not like the font...hehehe...I'm heading to bed...I did as many as I could review tonight...Good night...Frieda...

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks again, have a good sleep Glen.

[Barbara Walker]

It seems on dismal days, it's easier to look back, forgetting the bad and seeing just the good.

[JenniferMarie]

Beautiful poem. Beautiful tone.

[Tiffany Boles]

So sad, and yet true. A very well written piece.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tiffany, jazzed you enjoyed.

[Aethereal]

After all is said and done, we remember the splendid excitement of a stormy love affair.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Aethereal.

[Aethereal]

You're welcome!

[Coyote Poetry]

Artwork and poetry was amazing. Good to swim in passion and desire. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Coyote.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like this...yes, a relationship once poured passion like rain, but turned sour, so now she still thinks of him, but only on "dismal days"

very cool..i like the sneer feel of this.

biting.

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, I like biting ;-)

[annie lee]

Lovely words that paint a lovely picture but an ominous end. Sad but beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much annie, really appreciate your visit.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

That last line is a killer. Is this a real relationship? if not you have a way of putting feeling into empty rooms!

[Frieda P]

It was, ancient history...thanks so much John.

[kublakhan27]

Wow, this one has rendered me speechless...it's amazing...the imagery is haunting and beautiful, every line is just perfect...one of my new favourites from the Mrs.R catalogue...brilliant.

[Frieda P]

Wow I'm pleasantly surprised Benji, I don't know why, didn't think this one would float your boat that way, thanks hon! xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad to know I can still surprise you after all this time Mrs.R ;) Always a pleasure...xo