Fearful Light

Inspired by Dax

I won't cry for you anymore

you were the stars, the moon

   i lived within your cosmos

I feared the light without you

    skies turned a    vacant ash

cried an ocean's raindrops

    under deserted rue'd 

skies

the music ceased

                 i tried to dance

i faltered, and fragmented

     unfurled by splintered crystal

In your b'moaned absence

        breathing shattered glass,

i sing a dusky haunted tune 

         still, I won't weep

           whilst you fade in past tears...

         

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

I have been reading these past days...
Now I must leave a footprint in the sands of this pristine bay of healing words...
Freida, I think now the lost one can stop her tears as well. The fading is not from memory or from life, but from sorrow.
While sorrows fade, new life can be understood and embraced!
This is what you gave me in spirit as I read these words...
Even as my sorrows fade.
Be well dearest friend.

[Frieda P]

Oh Scott my dear friend, my heart stopped when I saw you had graced my page with your kind words, miss you like crazy...hope you are well, thank you for your sweet thoughts, always xo

[David Scott]

Worry not. I have been reading my friends as your words are a comfort to me. Sorry for any cardiovascular interruption. ;) I enjoyed the poem and the state of mind behind it.

[Frieda P]

A comfort to me is knowing you're well, as much as I want you back here, take good care, and sending a huge huggle your way xo :-)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this could be either kind of loss...death or break up...

seems more towards break up to me..the tears freeze after a while...i will get my life back...it revolved around you and i should not have let it...


as always your wording is impeccable...you write tragedy, sadness, angst...better than most poets i have ever read.

[wordwarrior]

Oh wow Frieda, this is just heart breaking. Your imagery and the metaphors in this are spectacular and paint a poem of such pain and sadness as you try to move on.
Wonderful writing, as always!
Congratulations to you also for your 800th poem here!!! Write on!

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much wordwarrior, much appreciate your ever kind thoughts.

[Corset]

Oh you hussy, this made me tear up! nooo lores! This is such a beautiful poem!

[Frieda P]

Ha I love when you call me hussy, thanks for the gracious review! x

[Corset]

:) Its the luck of the draw on your page, tears or laughter, it's a gamble. this is gorgeous. I took my chances, you were worth it.

[Frieda P]

I always thought you were a gambling woman :-)

[MikeV]

This touched my heart, very beautiful write!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Mike, jazzed it did so....!

[Revery]

The resilience of the human heart is unfathomable sometimes. It goes on when we thought it wouldn't. We go on though. Nice write Frieda. I especially like the line, "breathing shattered glass"

[Frieda P]

Yes I'm amazed most times myself Revery, thanks so much...

[lee von cleef]

A dark river full of black Lilly pads, Hope the frog leaves my throat.your making me bleed.seep ,weep,

[Frieda P]

Don't cry for me Argentina....passin you some tissues....

[Pryde Foltz]

i faltered, and fragmented
unfurled by splintered crystal
In your b'moaned absence
breathing shattered glass

Been there. How sharp those tears can be at time. Great write, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Slow torture when it's happening, yes....thanks Pryde.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, if only those who broke our hearts could fade in the tears we shed for them. There is palpable longing, loss, sadness, and shattered frustration in your imagery. "An ocean's raindrops".....this says it all. While the poem is hauntingly sad, it does seem to end on a hopeful note. Very well written, Frieda. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Grazie mile Lydie, always appreciate your thoughts....