~ Dark Angel Tears

I bled out through dark ashes

in attempts to heal stardust

You were floating on fluttered

     air of sea foamed ripples

My breath was stifled infinitely,

    intrinsic absence in your rhapsody

Drowning in abysmal insanity

 these depths of pensive poetry

    sworn  flourish of successful flight

Our blood mingled upon dismal wings

   henceforth glimpsing timelessness

        reverie

 of envisioned dark angel tears

Author's Note

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is one of your most imaginative and melodic pieces Mrs.R...you've said you're not into myths yet this one has a mythological quality to it...don't lose faith in poetry, even the pensive kind, to keep you afloat amid the insanity...life is littered with letdowns but poetry is not among them :) xo

[Frieda P]

Afloat amid the insanity, how aptly put Steve, thanks so much my friend. :-) xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Frieda :) xo

[Frieda P]

You must be rubbing off on me if this has a mythological feel :-) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha you tell me Mrs.R ;)

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

"I bled out through dark ashes" is such a beautiful and memorable opening line. It immediately captures the reader. "Floating on fluttered air ... " is also beautiful. I love the way that the words just roll off the tongue. There is a beautiful poignancy throughout that belies the darkness. It's almost like a beautiful gothic.

[Astro]

A symbiotic scene captured in Friedaisms peeling back the third eye of the readers mind and allowing it to see the nature born in each of your words.
"floating on fluttered
air of sea foamed ripples"

[Frieda P]

You've touched me with this review Astro , ha 'Friedaisms' made me laugh, thanks I needed that my sweet friend............

[Astro]

My pleasure. xo

[TL Boehm]

bled out through dark ashes in attempts to heal stardust. That line goes right to the core. Well done, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Tam...

[Siren]

"My breath was stifled infinitely,...
these depths of pensive poetry.....
reverie of envisioned dark angel tears"

I think if angels cried, if they ever lamented, they would find comfort and justice in your words. Never overly stated, not minimized... But, a deep truth that even we humans might attempt to understand, and feel at least as deeply. Wonderful write!

[Frieda P]

My hopes are that at least one angel does Siren, thanks for your gracious response.

[Siren]

Wonderfully welcome, my friend (:

[Trace]

I will just say: simply beautiful. Trace

[Frieda P]

Thank you, I do appreciate your simple, yet elegant review....

[joshua deathdealer]

You write beautifully. Thank you for sharing.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading and your kind review joshua.

[Kelly Scheppers]

A little chill of the dark side wears well on your muse...very nice, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Kelly!

[Leslie Philibert]

A poet I know well and like, here a great mix of the quatrain, triolets and couplets packed with fine images.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your gracious review my friend, much appreciated Leslie.

[beautiful dreamer]

choo choo choo choo choo. figured you'd like to hear my "i'm so impressed i can't figure out what to say so i'm going to make train noises until i can find another word another than wow" noises. this is marvelous. imagery dripping from every line laced with explicit diction and making me sound poetic in my own review trying to describe how great your poem is. one word wraps it up. wowsers.

[Frieda P]

Wowsers to your review Jen...it's a poem in itself, thanks muchly!

[beautiful dreamer]

haha i have that problem i get so wrapped up in how much i like it i start making up word and finally just pull up the dictionary and find words that mean what im trying to say. plus i'm in a super analysis course right now lol

[Frieda P]

Hahaha they're teaching choo choo now? ;-)

[beautiful dreamer]

no thats just me!

[beautiful dreamer]

thats where i got muchly from!