This is one of your most imaginative and melodic pieces Mrs.R...you've said you're not into myths yet this one has a mythological quality to it...don't lose faith in poetry, even the pensive kind, to keep you afloat amid the insanity...life is littered with letdowns but poetry is not among them :) xo
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11 Years Ago
Afloat amid the insanity, how aptly put Steve, thanks so much my friend. :-) xo
"I bled out through dark ashes" is such a beautiful and memorable opening line. It immediately captures the reader. "Floating on fluttered air ... " is also beautiful. I love the way that the words just roll off the tongue. There is a beautiful poignancy throughout that belies the darkness. It's almost like a beautiful gothic.
A symbiotic scene captured in Friedaisms peeling back the third eye of the readers mind and allowing it to see the nature born in each of your words.
"floating on fluttered
air of sea foamed ripples"
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11 Years Ago
You've touched me with this review Astro , ha 'Friedaisms' made me laugh, thanks I needed that my sw.. read moreYou've touched me with this review Astro , ha 'Friedaisms' made me laugh, thanks I needed that my sweet friend............
"My breath was stifled infinitely,...
these depths of pensive poetry.....
reverie of envisioned dark angel tears"
I think if angels cried, if they ever lamented, they would find comfort and justice in your words. Never overly stated, not minimized... But, a deep truth that even we humans might attempt to understand, and feel at least as deeply. Wonderful write!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
My hopes are that at least one angel does Siren, thanks for your gracious response.
This is one of your most imaginative and melodic pieces Mrs.R...you've said you're not into myths yet this one has a mythological quality to it...don't lose faith in poetry, even the pensive kind, to keep you afloat amid the insanity...life is littered with letdowns but poetry is not among them :) xo
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Afloat amid the insanity, how aptly put Steve, thanks so much my friend. :-) xo
choo choo choo choo choo. figured you'd like to hear my "i'm so impressed i can't figure out what to say so i'm going to make train noises until i can find another word another than wow" noises. this is marvelous. imagery dripping from every line laced with explicit diction and making me sound poetic in my own review trying to describe how great your poem is. one word wraps it up. wowsers.
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11 Years Ago
Wowsers to your review Jen...it's a poem in itself, thanks muchly!
11 Years Ago
haha i have that problem i get so wrapped up in how much i like it i start making up word and finall.. read morehaha i have that problem i get so wrapped up in how much i like it i start making up word and finally just pull up the dictionary and find words that mean what im trying to say. plus i'm in a super analysis course right now lol
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..