The Space Between the Rain

The space between us, speaks loudly

            crushing out 

                    the center of our world

   our corrupt lies retract reparations,

          in contempt of love

I run from you as I run towards you,

    words confuse the deceptive

                                    games we play 

         less pain in the gray facade

  sad rain falls in torrents

     we fall between the tears

            yet the fires still scorches

is there a wrong & right

                    ... Or just what's left

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

You make me think...
Can we dodge the consequences of our actions? Can we walk into a storm and not be drenched?
Yes, there is space between the raindrops... But we cannot live protected in this space.
Still, we seem to find this magical place as we give our hearts to follow the path of love.

[Frieda P]

Hey that's a good thing, no Scott? We try though, don't we, thanks muchly my friend.

[Distantview123]

A bitter-sweet and heartfelt write. Love can be heaven and love can be hell...a double-edged sword indeed. Some really good imagery in this poem. A good read. ~ Robert.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for visiting my page Robert, and the luverly review.

[SyberRose]

love hurts when its not reciprocated...nicely penned Frieda as always...Enjoyed...Rose

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rose, jazzed you did....

[Horizon K.]

The space between two people, not physically but metaphorically fascinates me, as we do try to fill and define this space. And when it is clouded, when words spoken are vague or layered or can be alternately interpreted... or games... how does this change this space, fills it with rain and fears. Can the space be cleared... And how... Does love need to be defined so that it is not lost? I love this piece Frieda.

[Frieda P]

...and I love your insightful review Horizon, thanks so much.

[Glen Yumang Manese]

we fall between the tears
yet the fires still scorches
is there a wrong & right

... Or just what's left

The ending...takes this one...I see you had a bit of inspiration with the music and the title...plus the picture with this one...that line got me the most in this one...the rest completes this also...thanks for the invite...

[Frieda P]

Yes, Dave Matthews music always inspires me, thanks Glen, thought you might like this font...

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I hate it...I mean I dislike very much...hehehe...you're welcome by the way...

[Frieda P]

Haha, I give up! You're a pain in the tuchus Glen. ;-)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Georgia is my method of madness...Georgia on my mind...Ray Charles...now that has rhythm...

[Frieda P]

You need to expand your horizons....get a new rhythm once in a while. :-)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Miami is a good one...I like the boredom...keeps me in check...hehehe...I guess its different from one writer to the next...I have been complaining to others...too...if that makes you feel better...

[Frieda P]

No it doesn't....I don't have a sense of humor. ;-)

[Jack...]

Frieda, like a hot cup of coffee in the morning, your words comfort me and open my eyes, preparing me for the day ahead. Soft and delicious is how this feels, love, in between the raindrops, right or wrong, who cares? When it is felt, it doesn't matter if it is raining, snowing or the world is ending, all you know is you want to be in their arms...and nothing else matters. It is hard to fight these feelings, fear touches your heart, memories of rains past flood your soul, do you walk out without an unbrella or do you remain inside where it is safe and warm? The heart speaks in funny languages, do we heed the warnings or throw caution to the wind...or the rain? Very nicely done.

[Frieda P]

Haha, I need to slow down on the coffee, I was saying Thanks Jack, 'nothing else matters' now you've got Metallica stuck in my head! I usually opt for no umbrella, but that has gotten me all wet before! :-)

[Mehak Mushtaq]

Beautiful, Frieda! I just love it. I run from you as I run towards you," So true and so beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Mehak, glad you enjoyed.

[Mehak Mushtaq]

:) anytime.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

So touching, :) love the thought flowing in this piece. Very honest and captivating. Love it Frie Always.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Marc, nice to see you again.... :-)