The Space Between the Rain

The space between us, speaks loudly

            crushing out 

                    the center of our world

   our corrupt lies retract reparations,

          in contempt of love

I run from you as I run towards you,

    words confuse the deceptive

                                    games we play 

         less pain in the gray facade

  sad rain falls in torrents

     we fall between the tears

            yet the fires still scorches

is there a wrong & right

                    ... Or just what's left

Author's Note

Reviews

[David Scott]

You make me think...
Can we dodge the consequences of our actions? Can we walk into a storm and not be drenched?
Yes, there is space between the raindrops... But we cannot live protected in this space.
Still, we seem to find this magical place as we give our hearts to follow the path of love.

[Frieda P]

Hey that's a good thing, no Scott? We try though, don't we, thanks muchly my friend.

[Kleio13]

Reminds that there's always that other someone who stills wants you....

[Frieda P]

Possibly Kleios! Thanks ;-)

[MsJewel]

I run to you as I run from you - a feeling I know all to well - Is there a wrong when it comes to love - or is it always right.. I'm not sure, but one thing I do know, you write the most beautiful love poems. :) Julie

[Frieda P]

Thanks Julie, I think many of us do. :-)

[s y e]

This is so relatable to a lot of people, M. F - I love how you touch on the game of emotions between the two lovers and that there will be a winner and a loser or both winners. This is amazing, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your insightful review noodlebumble...muchly appreciated.

[shallimarRose]

"I run from you as I run towards you" Very well I know these feelings..
Very nice poem. The title drew me in.. xo Rose

[Frieda P]

I think many couples can relate to that one, especially us silly women shallimar, thanks so much x

[Lydia Shutter]

When a relationship is emotionally so wrong, but the physical part feels so right, it is difficult to know what path to take. You've said this so well, Frieda. "the space between us speaks loudly" such a descriptive line. Very good write. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Thanks Lydi, jazzed you enjoyed.

[Dye]

Of the ones I've read, this one is my favorite so far. I read it as two lovers almost in denial about their relationship. As much as they love each other, they hurt each other and may be better apart. I don't know. But if you tell me this is about puppy dogs frolicking in a beautiful meadow with kittens I'm going to give up even trying to figure out poetry. LOL

[Frieda P]

Laughing here! I don't think poetry 'needs' to be figured out, I think if you 'feel' it, it's good to go and apparently you did, so thanks muchly! ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

"in contempt of love

I run from you as I run towards you,

words confuse the deceptive

games we play "
You have asked a very important question that I need to ponder when it comes to love : Is there a right or wrong ? Now that is deep and powerful. I also like how you touch on the aspect of the game of emotions between the two lovers and that there will be a winner and a loser or both winners . Who knows until...???
Thank you for sharing the philosophy in your great writes...:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Sami, one of these days I'm going to stump you too. ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[redflutterby]

This one hits very close to home for me...feelings and thoughts I've struggled with more then once. And the song just resonates with the poem. Great write here...xoxo

[Frieda P]

I figured it might for more than a few, thanks so much Red....xo

[prachi prangya agasti]

sweet and beautiful.... a nice one... pleased to read...

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille prachi...

[Justaguy]

There is always a wrong and a right, a good and evil, a happy and sad. Its not really about which one someone is, but more how much we allow each inside. I like this a lot.

[Frieda P]

That's easy for you to say....thanks muchly :-)

[Justaguy]

Things are always easier to say, than to do. You are very welcome

[Frieda P]

Exactly, especially when it comes to relationships.....

[Justaguy]

I could not agree more