Soft music, flickering candles, moon light reflecting in your eyes, satin skin, jasmine fragrance as soft shears dance with the breeze of the evening, a warm bed, hot passion, chocolate martinis, sweet lips tantalizing, temptations engulfs as the night is young... Just got carried away with the poem and the music. Amazing my sweet friend.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Holy Jack! I like where you took this, now I need a cigarette..............and a cool shower.
the font change with seduces me is brillant ; puts the idea or event in the forefront, a shout, a cry, like too the two lines with the spaced phrase ; very good.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks Leslie, I was hoping that would work, much appreciate your input...
Check this out. My phone can suddenly speak Spanish. De hecho la prueba de que se puede hacer en tu .. read moreCheck this out. My phone can suddenly speak Spanish. De hecho la prueba de que se puede hacer en tu casa. I have no idea what that says
Thanks jacob, was hoping that would work, wasn't sure about that and the last line, whether to leave.. read moreThanks jacob, was hoping that would work, wasn't sure about that and the last line, whether to leave it off and up to the reader's imagination, glad you enjoyed.
11 Years Ago
you could have left the last two lines off...but the faded ink effect does work pretty well... .. read moreyou could have left the last two lines off...but the faded ink effect does work pretty well...
and it is good there..i wouldn't take it out...
it is like an afterthought...but an important one.
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..