Reflective Views

~I watched you

from distant shorelines of my mind

as the waves came crashing in

Butterfly ripplings on twinkling seas,

felt the safe harbor within memories

The horizon met with the sun

always dipping away into darkness 

till a lighthouse guides the way 

Brilliance of reflective views

sailed adrift to a new dawning~

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

With the thought of butterfly ripplings comes my favorite quote: ``Love is like a butterfly. If you chase after it, it will fly away. But if you are patient, and wait long enough, it will land in your hands.``
To imagine gazing at an ocean fluttering by and by like a butterfly intrigues me, and I can't exactly envision the scene perfectly due to the many feelings induced by the thought. To fall in love with the sea, and feel the overwhelming urge to leap in despite the knowledge the particular ripple you'd like to feel would be far out of reach by the time you land in, leaving you to drown by your own actions. Only the ripple is a metaphor for a person and you know that the person will be long gone soon.
I'm not sure if you've implied that with the poem, but you've certainly outdone yourself and caressed your talents.

[Frieda P]

Sometimes your brilliance is shocking Tai....thanks for this insightful & lovely review.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this has a lot of layers, like the elements of the oceanic experience
you re-create it quite well; kudos on that

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the visit & review, muchly appreciated...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this to me speaks of a lost loved one...where the horizon meets the sun...someone who shone, and now is off on the horizon somewhere...living with the sunsets...

beautifully drawn picture in words.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your insightful review jacob....

[Rita L. Sev]

Butterfly ripplings on twinkling seas,
felt the safe harbor within memories...

These lines stood out - just lovely... (of course I would choose the rhymers...) :)

The lighthouse and the new dawn... there is always hope. Love this, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Funny Rita, I didn't even realized it rhymed until you pointed it out...ha, thanks :-)

[Pryde Foltz]

Here's to a new shore and a new ship
filled with officer, gentlemen types
not a bunch of one-eyed pirates

I apologize but you poem brought the this to mind. Really, a very lovely and romantic piece. Again forgive me.

[Frieda P]

Ha whatever floats your boat Pryde...I have no objection to the officer, gentlemen type...thanks.

[kublakhan27]

I relate to all of your pieces, but this might take the cake...this sounds just like my parents' back yard, and I have photos to prove it...it also reflects the way I think as I reflect on that scenery...this will have a prominent place in my library :)

[Frieda P]

From what you've told me, yes...I can understand how you can relate Benji...thanks muchly :-)

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Mrs.R :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

What a beautiful picture you have painted.. the morning couldn't have been more lovely than that of a new dawn...
This is simply breathtaking, Friedalicious!!~xoxo~:)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille cara, jazzed you liked it :-) xoxox

[Aethereal]

This is a very beautiful poem with wonderful lines: It inspired me to use one of your lines to write this gift poem for you which you may keep as your own since I used so many of your words to create it. It's in /0/0/0/0/ nine syllable meter with overlapping rhyme.

Reflections

From the distant shorelines of my mind
tall waves from my past come crashing in.
Memories of you leave me spellbind
thinking of you at this time again.

[Frieda P]

Thanks again Aethereal, love the word spellbind by the way....

[Aethereal]

I'm happy that you like it! This is just a song that was going through my mind as I was reading your poem.

[Sami Khalil]

Reflective views stay intact even when the sun goes down and then rises up for they are etched in our recesses and crevices . Our eyes capture the world and its events and the mind processes them all while the spirit makes sense of its spiritual values...A splendid read and write...:)

[Frieda P]

Love your interpretation here Sami, thanks muchly my friend! :-)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[prachi prangya agasti]

nice one... great flow.... i liked it...

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille prachi....

[Troy Henson]

An easy gliding and masterful short write Frieda. I do love these ones as the impact is so great in such few lines.

Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your kind review Troy, glad you enjoyed this one....