The musicality of this dances off of the page. It's beauty fills the air:
Bemused poesy
staining the skin
penetrating the heart
absorbed within ardent spirit,
life revealed before our eyes
folded over neatly
waiting to be heralded
recognized by mankind
Pretty cool Frieda, I like the opening as it feels a bit like a list of affirmations or prescribed desires. Then the middle a clever description wrapped in metaphor leading to a great ending with the title as its point. Well done friend.
A lyrical recipe of words and music creating breathtaking images for this world or whatever comes after (and before.) Ink can record the musical notes and the poem's words, but only a magician can make them swirl into one and light up the sky.
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Thanks for your kind words minichinz, muchly appreciated...
This is one of the most uplifting pieces you've ever written...even though there is dark imagery within, there is a feeling in this one...I don't know if optimism is the right word, maybe motivating describes it best...whatever the case, it's beautiful work, as it always it when you write :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
I was having a moment, thanks so much Benji :-)
11 Years Ago
Haha save one of those moments for me if you come across anymore ;P
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