you give such a deep look at your passion! It's almost like memories jumping into the air. ...landing as small kisses trailing down the senses.Long pauses to let us know we are still breathing.I almost want to close the curtains as I read this for it makes me feel naked. you have done your job well here Frieda! Superb!
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11 Years Ago
Oh my I almost missed this magnificent review from you Queenie, thanks so much, you've made my day m.. read moreOh my I almost missed this magnificent review from you Queenie, thanks so much, you've made my day more joyful!
Lovely desire in this poem, I'd cut out "and blossomed desire" though, too many syllables in that last line compared to the rest of the poem's lines. Also it would be a lovely image to end on. Thank you for sharing.
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11 Years Ago
Thanks eglantine, yes, it might be too many syllables but it's the essence of the poem in my mind..... read moreThanks eglantine, yes, it might be too many syllables but it's the essence of the poem in my mind....glad you enjoyed it.
As always...those captivating words from Frieda. This is a wonderful piece, but still I can feel that sadness in these lines:
"You haunt my dreams
in long pauses of nightfall"
"one sweet day to revisit "
How long is a night to feel the memories once more and then realize it's only a reminiscence?
Well-penned, Frieda.
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11 Years Ago
Very long night Dhaye, thanks so much for your thoughts here...
How utterly romantic... long pauses of nightfall... aspiring to dusty shelves... Yes, feelings like this, should be breathed in slowly, remembered, the delicate blue of passion's flame... another beautiful piece from you Frieda... I love your poetry in this place...
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..