Anticipation's Rhyme

Anticipation, locked away in my heart

   when love grew old and dreary

     where once upon a time shone vivid light

Your face still haunts my memories

   haltingly beautiful eyes that captivated

    windows to your soul, now darkened with time

Yet, I can't help but think of you & reminisce 

when pensive rain hits my window pane

the sad sounds reminds me of an old rhythm

              when our poetry still rhymed ~

 

We danced in well versed enraptured ecstasy

              and there was no such thing as time

Reviews

[Astro]

The personification of rain was well used to further the sadness and allow for greater impact of those final and very touching thoughts. "our poetry" only a great writer could impart such an all encompassing way to describe a relationship. Well done Frieda, short and sweet.

[Frieda P]

Wow Astro thanks for such a gracious review, muchly appreciated.

[Astro]

Il y a pas de quoi, mon ami!

[Frieda P]

Ah but it was, mon sweet. :-)

[Larry Dyson]

very much appreciating the flow and rhyme submersed in the dance of the thoughts.... together.Laury

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Laury...

[Pryde Foltz]

A lovely write of love, romance, and missing. You words beautiful as always.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pryde, better than frogs eh? ;-)

[Pryde Foltz]

Nah!!! Frogs work just as well for me, but I'm weird that way.

[Frieda P]

Haha I'll remember that...

[Leslie Philibert]

I really like this, with its 19th century richness,classic romantic verse, great job.

[Frieda P]

19th century richness, I love that, thanks Leslie!

[MOON]

Beautifully rendered verse Frieda full of longing of time past , the depths of feeling ! Lovely

[Frieda P]

Thank you MOON, glad you enjoyed it...

[LadySoDivine]

Such a wonderful poem. So much longing and nostalgia in only a few simple and sweet verses. The whole poem has a very melancholic feeling. I also love the use of a different color and formatting, it gives it a unique touch. Very lovely piece of work, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your glowing review Lady....

[Rita L. Sev]

A lovely longing felt here; no regret, just nostalgia... Very nice, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rita, jazzed you like this one!

[Ken Simm.]

Memorable memories seemingly etched into glass. Beautifully written Frieda. Delicate and crystal. Finely spun and silken.

[Frieda P]

Such a lovely review, thanks so much Ken.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have different memories that come from this...although it is seemingly about someone who has been lost...i feel a time lost...in youth, in Vermont...when days were long with anticipation, life moved more slowly and every day was a vibrant run through beautiful landscapes...

now those memories still haunt, in a good way...but they seem so distant now at times...as if..well, did they ever really exist at all?

[Frieda P]

Love your interpretation jacob, glad it brought back some happy memories...yep they did exist.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I must say, this is one of your best, Frieda!

You have etched the stolen moments of time, regrets, and yearning. The vision of heartbreak has come to life, and you are the gifted artist to sketch the beauty of that pain...

Eloquent write!~xoxo~

[Frieda P]

Wow Robbie, you're too kind my sweet friend, I'm doing the happy dance to your review, thanks muchly! xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's an amazing write, Friedalicious... dance arse off!! ~xoxo~:D

[Robbie~xoxo~]

dance *your* arse off!! (he he)

[Frieda P]

I wish, if only that worked! Lol....

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It does work, but not overnight!! LOL :D

[Frieda P]

Ha lifetime! I'd tell you I love you with my whole arse, since it's bigger than my heart. Lol ;-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

awwww Love it!...Baby's got back!! ;)

[Frieda P]

Hahaha laughing here! :-D And she can dance to it too!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Go girl!!.. ;D

[Frieda P]

OMG....now I have that big butts song in my head, thanks muchly Robbie!! ;-P

[lee von cleef]

no such thing as time....no time to corral your life in corners,no lines of age to rope you down,Just a banjo ,thumb an claw hammer ,plunking notes to punctuate pebbles punching holes in Pollies pond.God I love her.

[Frieda P]

Pollies? I thought you love moi?!

[lee von cleef]

LMNOQRST tooo much cooffee....

[Frieda P]

Join the clubbbbbbbbb...

[lee von cleef]

ah ..........