~Dark Side of the Moon

Collaboration with Jack, needless to say, he's the light side.

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

Stunning collaboration, Frieda and Jack both!! Both of you have composed some incredible imagery for this piece (which I happen to be partial to in poetry).

Jack, I love your "dark side," so to speak, with its "deeper shade of black devoured your soul." And just as much, Frieda, I love your "light side," with its "fireflies flicker," and "tears evaporate in reflected heat," and "dawn's sweet zephyrs on jeweled beams." What an intense combination of positive/negative images, so romantic, loving, and adventurous!!! Ooh, I'm just gushing. :-P

[Frieda P]

Jazz'd you enjoyed this collaboration, but Jack was the light, you know where that leaves me ;-) Thanks muchly Eric....!

[Robert Strzalko]

I'm a huge Pink Floyd fan and a huge Zeppelin fan also. Hearing Wish You Were Here immediately caught my attention. It's a great song. As far as the writing goes, I enjoyed it. Your collaboration went well.

[Frieda P]

Thanks, almost forgot about this one, jazz'd you enjoyed our collaboration.

[Nick.B]

Great poem accompanied with an amazing song...life and all it's wonders into the closure of friends and family...great job

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit and review Nick, muchly appreciated, glad you enjoyed.

[Tai Ryens]

I see a relationship in which dwindling mental health would mean devastation for both parties, in the case of your poem it might've already happened, but the significant other returns to care for the other despite his condition... I liked it.

[Frieda P]

Isn't mental health always dwindling Tai, thanks so ....

[Dana Alsamsam]

another lovely collaboration! this is like the wheel of the world going round and coming back again. both the dark and the light hold their beauty just as both of you hold talent as writers in completely different ways. i love the form that you chose to use. fading to black and then coming back to life! loved this piece and of course the pink floyd song :)

[Frieda P]

Sorry Dana, almost missed your luverly review, muchly appreciated...& of course Pink Ployd. :-)

[Keith]

Well done guys. Great images in both pieces the gloomy then enlightenment, like the 'last post' followed by revelly'

[Frieda P]

Thank you Keith, glad you enjoyed our collaboration, last post was Jack, he always brings the smiles.

[LadySoDivine]

What a wonderful collaboration. I see this as a representation of life, because everything in life has balance. There can be no yin without a yang, no earth without the sky, no happiness without sadness, no Sun without the Moon... And no light without darkness.

The descriptions and metaphors used worked very well together and I like the picture that they paint when combined. I also very much enjoyed the way the poem itself was formed. I believe, at least because of myself, that when readers see a poem that was not traditionally formed and aligned, they have even more wish to read it.

All in all, I truly loved this piece and as always, I am overjoyed to see one of your collaborations. You two work really well together. :) Great job!

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Lady, love your review, Yin & Yang....yes, so true.

[Leslie Philibert]

clever, well structured poem, with a concrete form and the right sided allignment with loads of good imagery. Excellent.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this great review Leslie, jazzed you enjoyed it.

[Barbara Walker]

illuminating my heart in showering sparks of the happy memories-love this line! Interesting, unique structure! Enjoyed this very much!

[Frieda P]

I love that line too, that's Jack's, glad you enjoyed our collaboration Barbara, thanks!

[Bgbradley]

Hi:) I love the content of ~Dark Side of the Moon and I am impressed with the form I which you wrote it.
The second verse does have calming melodic lyrics. Nice work!

[Frieda P]

Second stanza is all just Jack, he does light so well, thanks for your visit and review Bgbradley...much appreciated....