~Give Me My Wings~

...i run to catch you

          but your essence is fleeting

birds seem to know the answers

           that escape my reasoning

the heart took a rumble

               and the clouds darkened 

skies parted just to glimpse

               a glance of your grace

whilst doves sang hymns

            in light of your plight

i thought the story had ended

          but your flight had just begun

the writing on the wall read,

             'give me my wings, I'm coming home'

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this piece is so beautiful! i often think that the creatures that live around us in the world are far more aware of what is occurring in our world than even we are. maybe we ought to listen to those birds a bit more. your words here are so clandestine and give me the sense of a person's spirit living on long after their life has ended. with your words you give them wings, frieda! they may stay among us forever.

[Frieda P]

Sweet thought Dana, thanks so much.

[Astro]

Very beautiful imagery, expressed in this one and metaphorically speaking this one is like iron, strong. I like the clever change up in the rhyme scheme as well, it seemed to strengthen the impact of the emotion especially in the final lines. Great job Frieda.

P.S. I think there is a typo on "seem(s)" should you wish to correct it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Astro, means a lot coming from you....will check out that typo, thanks again.

[Astro]

You're welcome, always a pleasure.

[Shaun Payton]

The flight sometimes is choice that defies our hearts and minds reasoning, and is hard to process, beautiful lives we see end, tragic and enlightening, live every moment.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Shaun...

[Shaun Payton]

:):):):):):):):)

[SteveB]

Lovely twist at the end. Quite a surprise. Well done Frieda

[Frieda P]

Always a plus when it's a surprise, thanks Steve.

[Tarry Franck]

Such a beautiful poem and a great song to go with it. My favorite artist: Melissa Ethridge

[Frieda P]

One of my favorite artists too, thanks Tarry, nice to see you again...

[Tarry Franck]

Nice to be back Frieda and to read you writings. I've missed you!!!!

[ANTO]

Truly moved me Frieda. Im....speechless
X

[Frieda P]

You humble me Anthony, thanks so much. x

[s y e]

Another good write from you, as always. You brighten peoples day up with your writing, just like they all said.

[Frieda P]

Thanks noodlebumble! x

[Lydia Shutter]

When someone you love is headed down a dangerous path of course you attempt to pull them back, to save them. Unfortunately sometimes that is just not possible. Yes, the birds know their wings can take them away. However, it is not always to a place we can see....not a tangible realm. There is a beautiful spirituality to this write. Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Thanks Lydi, appreciate your visit & review, glad you enjoyed this one.

[Troy Henson]

The fleeting heart Frieda is one that hurts sometimes with addiction. If only we could hang on to the ones we love forever....would life and love then be so grand.

Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Troy.

[Nkosana B Masuku]

A beautiful poem to wake me up.Loved this one

[Frieda P]

Kind of you to say Nikosana, thanks.

[Nkosana B Masuku]

you welcome

[N!LoC]

ooo a very nice poem.... :-)

[Frieda P]

Thanks N!LoC. :-)