~Give Me My Wings~

...i run to catch you

          but your essence is fleeting

birds seem to know the answers

           that escape my reasoning

the heart took a rumble

               and the clouds darkened 

skies parted just to glimpse

               a glance of your grace

whilst doves sang hymns

            in light of your plight

i thought the story had ended

          but your flight had just begun

the writing on the wall read,

             'give me my wings, I'm coming home'

Author's Note

Reviews

[Dana Alsamsam]

this piece is so beautiful! i often think that the creatures that live around us in the world are far more aware of what is occurring in our world than even we are. maybe we ought to listen to those birds a bit more. your words here are so clandestine and give me the sense of a person's spirit living on long after their life has ended. with your words you give them wings, frieda! they may stay among us forever.

[Frieda P]

Sweet thought Dana, thanks so much.

[Tai Ryens]

Perhaps a cheerful overlook on death, and returning to the unknown abyss? How delicious~

[TL Boehm]

Give me my wings I'm coming home. That is such a beautiful line.

[Blue Ivory]

This is beautiful. It's scary feeling like you're about to lose someone, not knowing if they'll leave or stay. So the ending was very sweet.

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Siren, enjoy your day!

[Leslie Philibert]

a poem rich with evocative imagery...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Leslie...

[Ayvid N]

"birds seem to know the answers
that escape my reasoning" - These lines say it all, the longing, the loneliness.

Awesome imagery Frieda...Loved the ending...coming home...it's such a comforting, wonderful thought.

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Divya...glad you enjoyed this one.

[fireblossom]

Lovely. This can be so many things...on a relationship level, spiritual level,. It carries longing and no judgement. Very enjoyable.

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed this one fireblossom, love the new avatar by the way....

[Leandro Mendez]

beautifully written, great job, Frieda

[Frieda P]

Thanks muchly Leandro.

[Annabelle Lee]

At first I thought this poem was the narrator talking to or about the man upstairs and at the end I thought IT to be about a loved one.

[Frieda P]

It started out to be one thing, and then ended up being about my sister, yes...thanks Annabelle.

[kublakhan27]

Beautiful...it almost seems like your voice is branching out in recent writing, as I'm coming across elements in your work that are unique to me, some of which I've already pointed out...this poem has a certain peace-of-mind to it, a sense of contentment almost, that I'm not used to reading in you...a sense of urgency is the element I take most commonly from your words, but this is different, and different can be good...but throw all these ramblings out the window, there is still no doubt over who's voice is speaking here, and that voice belongs to an incredible poet that I will always look up to.

[Frieda P]

You're too kind my sweet friend, trying to be more positive on this subject but you know it's usually fleeting at best, thanks Steve. x

[kublakhan27]

I speak from the heart my dear, but yes I understand how fleeting it can be...at least there is poetry to provide the occasional respite...we would all be worse off without it...always a pleasure Frieda ..xo

[Frieda P]

I know you do, and your heart is huge, thanks my dear friend. xo

[prachi prangya agasti]

beautifully expressed with words... liked it....

[Frieda P]

Thanks prachi...