Disconnected Dreaming

Was I flying or

 was it, dying

in my dreams

          upon your soul

I was suspended in

 your lusty web

my heart and head

                                     disconnected

As I fell back to earth

 to find

there was

 no reason

           or rhyme

just shattered notions 

of love's emotions

Reviews

[Vikrantsingh]

Whew! I hope that was wonderful dream before disconnection as we have climax after interval in every movie :P
Just kidding dearie :) this is just a traveller from one world to another and you got me travelling from place to place with your word play here :)
Simply amazing and as usual Frieda got Karizmatic way of expressing with outstanding Calibre of executing the way which you always do :)
- Singh :)
100/100..... Just give me more opportunities to read such wonderful poems from you my dear buddie :)

[Frieda P]

Wooo, that's some review Singh, I'm going to have it bronzed and hang it on my wall! ;-) Thanks muchly my sweet friend!

[Vikrantsingh]

Sure you can do one for me atleast this thing will give me some boost to review all your poetry with such better comments ;)
- Singh :)
Belated Happy Birthday :)

[Angel]

This piece has the disjointed feel of a dream.
Very well done, my friend!

[Frieda P]

I was hoping it would convey that feeling, thanks so much Angel!

[Ruth]

This tumbles as does the heart when love is experienced, never straight forward and the presentation of this is lovely too xx

[Frieda P]

Much appreciate your kind words Poppy, thanks. xo

[Dhaye]

When we think too much, our imagination will lift us higher than we couldn't imagine. When we come back to reality, it's like falling into the ground...finding yourself broken into pieces.

Nice poem about realization. Good job, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dhaye.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You captured a deep emotion... some of us get caught in the web and only get entangled more when we struggle...

I feel your write more than words can allow me to express... this is touching, Friedalicious!

Well penned in it's simplicity... yet overflows with emotion to convey the pain.

[Frieda P]

Those webs are deadly, thanks Robbie. xo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Indeed they are. Well penned!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

~xoxo~ :) **********

[Frieda P]

Grazie mile my sweet friend!

[Robbie~xoxo~]

sei il benvenuto bella! ;D

[Sami Khalil]

"my heart and head

disconnected




As I fell back to earth

to find

there was

no reason

or rhyme

just shattered notions

of love's emotions"
I felt the power of realization of a sour relationship in this sad but realistic happenstance( intolerable ) of our lives. The form and wording are excellent...:)

[Frieda P]

Realistic happenstance, that only makes it sound tolerable, thanks Sami! :-)

[Sami Khalil]

I fixed it...It is intolerable dear one. I have to be more specific for I tend to write in generality. Thank you for pointing that out...You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha you didn't have to do that Sami, how did you manage it anyway? Thanks again, I knew what you meant by the way. ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

Magic...lol
Thank you kindly...:)

[Frieda P]

I knew you were a Warlock at heart. ;-P

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)...

[Rita L. Sev]

You used the format to your advantage here, Frieda - that disconnect from a person who was a dream... that became a nightmare of shattered emotion.

Great poetry...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rita, much appreciate your kind review...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wet dream then?
Lol!
Nice and as always so beautifully weighted and described!

[Frieda P]

John, I'm going to ignore that statement since I know you're off your rocker today....thanks my friend. :-)

[gabrielle]

sometimes it's difficult for us to draw the line between reality and illusion especially when there's a constant battle of the heart and the mind. As always, beautifully executed frieda =)

[Frieda P]

So true gabrielle, thanks so much. :-)

[Stella Armour]

disconnected.. the perfect word for how we are in dreams where we can let go of reality for a short time , and then having to disconnect from the fantasy of the dream...

[Frieda P]

Occasionally words do say exactly what we want them to say, thanks Stella & Happy Birthday my sweet friend!

[ShelleyA]

Hi Frieda. A lovely write and presentation about the duality of dreaming in each of the stanzas. Unique and beautiful interpretation in the wonder of your dreams in skillfully crafted free verse/rhyming blend which I enjoy. Good imagery, flow and tone. Lovely depth of feeling; I sense a fragmentation that is sown together in contrast with the desires felt in the opening lines of your poem, subconscious thoughts of love fractured, bleeding through into your dreams. Thought provoking. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

[Frieda P]

Thanks kindly for your very insightful review Shelley, much appreciated.

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Frieda. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Have a great day!