Disconnected Dreaming

Was I flying or

 was it, dying

in my dreams

          upon your soul

I was suspended in

 your lusty web

my heart and head

                                     disconnected

As I fell back to earth

 to find

there was

 no reason

           or rhyme

just shattered notions 

of love's emotions

Reviews

[Vikrantsingh]

Whew! I hope that was wonderful dream before disconnection as we have climax after interval in every movie :P
Just kidding dearie :) this is just a traveller from one world to another and you got me travelling from place to place with your word play here :)
Simply amazing and as usual Frieda got Karizmatic way of expressing with outstanding Calibre of executing the way which you always do :)
- Singh :)
100/100..... Just give me more opportunities to read such wonderful poems from you my dear buddie :)

[Frieda P]

Wooo, that's some review Singh, I'm going to have it bronzed and hang it on my wall! ;-) Thanks muchly my sweet friend!

[Vikrantsingh]

Sure you can do one for me atleast this thing will give me some boost to review all your poetry with such better comments ;)
- Singh :)
Belated Happy Birthday :)

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

I still envy hands that can put such depth in so few lines... it was a quick read, but it sits on your shoulders when you're done. Well done!

[TL Boehm]

heart and head disconnected - a spiders web - the stuff of dreams and deeper nightmares. Well penned.

[Tai Ryens]

Falling from love, rather than in (although some would debate that they're the same thing).
How grieving a topic, to know once you resided in the heavens only to descend back into reality.. well done.

[Leslie Philibert]

What I always note is the excellent way Frieda phrases...a perfect tempo, enjambment always finely tuned, very good...

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your glowing review Leslie, muchly appreciated.

[Leandro Mendez]

wow Frieda... I loved this piece, awesome job!!

[Frieda P]

Put a smile on my face Leandro, thanks!

[SteveB]

Nicely done. I know you claim not to rhyme but here you did it well. And while I am not usually a fan of tricks like odd spacing or typesetting here the offset "disconnected" worked very well to jar the reader.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Steve, you're right, sometimes it just happens to sneak by me though and it works...glad you liked my little disconnect...

[Pryde Foltz]

Nice write, Frieda. The meaning is clear but artistically expressed. I read it a few times, really enjoyable.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pryde, a few times, what an honor....

[Annabelle Lee]

Woah woah woah, I saw a few rhymes in there ;) that's not a Frieda piece!?!

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, believe me it was hardly planned! Thanks Annabelle, glad you liked my rhyme attempt! ;-)

[Astro]

I think Jim Morrison said it best, "When the musics over, turn out the lights". That dance that sweeps you off your feet, and you think your flying can feel cheap as buying a ticket to ride and only getting to go around once, when you realize it was never a true tango but more of a shuffling of feet. I like this one, as heartbreaking as it may be.

[Frieda P]

Woo Astro, your review is music to my ears...thanks so much!

[Astro]

You're welcome Frieda.

[Tarry Franck]

Frieda - you've done it again - Speechless

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Tarry, I need to visit your page soon, catching up on RR's since I was gone...

[Tarry Franck]

Thanks Frieda - I need to do the same with yours