~Cathartic

Bare your soul,

spill your blood on white pages

relinquish tears from thine eyes

purge your sins, unburden your heart

If thy pen finds nirvana

to write the light of day,

the darkness of night 

reads a lighter shade of gray

Reviews

[Ravyne Hawke]

I absolutely LOVE the last stanza! Not that the first is chopped liver; it is beautiful in its own way. But since I am a practicing Buddhist, the last stanza rings clear to me and true. Wonderful job of evoking emotions from the reader with this piece.

[Frieda P]

I didn't know you were a Buddhist Lori, no wonder you're so serene, and thanks so much.

[Ravyne Hawke]

I've been practicing Buddhism for about 10 years now.. with some Hinduism, Taoism and Native American Shamanism tossed in to keep me focused.

[Jack...]

Indeed, or hearts are in our poetry, our souls between the lines.

Very cool Frieda. Another beautiful piece.

[Frieda P]

Oops, was my soul showing? Thanks my sweet friend. :-)

[ShelleyA]

Hi Frieda. A beautiful write and message about cleansing yourself of pain and sorrow. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct. Vivid imagery. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. You express this purging through writing that can be uplifting and encouraging to all those who write. I can relate. I especially like these powerful lines:
"relinquish tears from thine eyes
purge your sins, unburden your heart"
In these words is the focal point, the central way in which to release burdens of your heart. Good word choice. Lovely use of contrast in the second stanza. Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

[Frieda P]

How I love your insightful reviews Shelley, let me count the ways, thanks so much!

[ShelleyA]

You're very welcome Frieda. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Have a great day!

[Rhiti Bose]

Few lines, yet so many messages. Brilliantly crafted.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rhiti

[Archangel Gabriel]

Frieda, you have me in chains of silk, a slave to your words!

[Frieda P]

Woo that tickled Gabriel, 'chains of silk'...love it!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I prefer to spill the blood of the detractors, the charlatans who pose as the righteous while burying the poets they have slaughtered. Ha sounds very dramatic! The poem is a lovely little piece which set against your last again shows you versatility and depth. Your output is awesome!

[Frieda P]

Laughing, go for it John! My white knight in shining armor....and I told you, it's cheaper than therapy! Thanks muchly...

[Pete Langley]

Simple and profound, sweet...and VERY positive, which is good! Hugs. P.

[Frieda P]

Ha. Every so often you'll get some positivity out of moi sweet P...thanks my dear friend! x

[PP]

Killer lines Frieda as always :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Tink! :-)

[Dr. Wood ?]

loads of punch in so few lines Frieda....You're just showing off now

[Frieda P]

Ha thanks Dave, jazzed you liked my 'showing off'.......! ;-)

[AYVID N]

Very impressive and beautifully written Frieda. Poetry is your catharisis and I must say the world is a more beautiful place with your poetry.

[Angi]

It usually helps me to spill the ink. Nicely done, Frieda. Angi~

[Frieda P]

Yep, purging can be so beneficial, saves on therapy. :-) Thanks Angi.