I absolutely LOVE the last stanza! Not that the first is chopped liver; it is beautiful in its own way. But since I am a practicing Buddhist, the last stanza rings clear to me and true. Wonderful job of evoking emotions from the reader with this piece.
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11 Years Ago
I didn't know you were a Buddhist Lori, no wonder you're so serene, and thanks so much.
11 Years Ago
I've been practicing Buddhism for about 10 years now.. with some Hinduism, Taoism and Native America.. read moreI've been practicing Buddhism for about 10 years now.. with some Hinduism, Taoism and Native American Shamanism tossed in to keep me focused.
Hi Frieda. A beautiful write and message about cleansing yourself of pain and sorrow. Heartfelt and thoughtful. Skillfully crafted free verse that is short, concise and succinct. Vivid imagery. Flow is good; line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm and use of enjambment. Lovely depth of feeling. You express this purging through writing that can be uplifting and encouraging to all those who write. I can relate. I especially like these powerful lines:
"relinquish tears from thine eyes
purge your sins, unburden your heart"
In these words is the focal point, the central way in which to release burdens of your heart. Good word choice. Lovely use of contrast in the second stanza. Very good closing lines. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!
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11 Years Ago
How I love your insightful reviews Shelley, let me count the ways, thanks so much!
11 Years Ago
You're very welcome Frieda. Always a pleasure to read your poetry. Have a great day!
I prefer to spill the blood of the detractors, the charlatans who pose as the righteous while burying the poets they have slaughtered. Ha sounds very dramatic! The poem is a lovely little piece which set against your last again shows you versatility and depth. Your output is awesome!
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11 Years Ago
Laughing, go for it John! My white knight in shining armor....and I told you, it's cheaper than the.. read moreLaughing, go for it John! My white knight in shining armor....and I told you, it's cheaper than therapy! Thanks muchly...
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..