Boiling Point

Another day dawned...

demanding a meed of flesh and blood

bones shattered under the pressure of the sun

purging the old and undertaken view

harmful toxins waited in the shade

til moon came out to play

stick a needle in your eye

step on all the cracks

break your mother's back

child's play grew up to be a cruelty 

in disguise of white candy crap

took the stranger in while looking for a solution

brain on fire, bubbled over on my skin

what is the boiling point of mind over matter?

Reviews

[s y e]

"stick a needle in your eye
step on all the cracks
break your mother's back"

Oooooh flip flops, love! This is a dark, powerful write. A lot of really vivid lines that make you go ouch! Ha, This is another outstanding write from you. I don't think the darkness would ever leave us fully, we just kind of get used to it being there, we have so much in our mind that it is weighing us down and yet, we still try and remain strong for others around us.

~ Noodlebumble ~~

[Frieda P]

Wooo another flip flops from Sye....made my night! x

[Dana Alsamsam]

we can only intellectualize situations so much before the emotion overwhelms and encompasses us. the pain and conflict is poignant and evident in this piece. screw superstitions- there is enough to be afraid of in this world. great work here!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Dana, this one is very personal and hits home, glad you enjoyed it.

[Mark]

Wherever you set it on the candy thermometer dear one. *hugs*

[Frieda P]

Hmm, I didn't know you could set it yourself, thanks for the info Mark...x

[Ruth]

I am in awe of your metaphor dear Poetesss xx

[Frieda P]

Sweet review Poppy, thank you muchly xo

[Pryde Foltz]

I am reminded of a grim fairytale. There is the grotesque on the top and the deeper meaning below. I am frightened and intrigued.

[Frieda P]

It's very frightening Pryde, and unfortunately it's not a fairytale, thanks for your thoughts.

[annie lee]

Frieda, you boldly explore the dark places some of us avoid at any cost. But you are brave enough to shine your light on these places, perhaps to bolster your own courage or the courage of others. Darkness needs to be exposed and discussed. It is the only way to exorcise the demons.

[Frieda P]

Avoidance to me only proves to make it churn and bubble around in skull harder, thanks for your kind words minichinz...

[shallimarRose]

Frieda a lot of what you write is dark.. I hope everything is ok. Thank you for the rr.. Rose

[Frieda P]

I write dark when I feel it, thanks shalimarRose, define okay....

[shallimarRose]

Well turn the lights on sweetie.. I battle depression, ptsd, fibromyalgia and a host of other ailements but i try to write in the light... Hope things get better .. huggs!!! Rose

[gabrielle]

you eloquently captured distressing and haunting circumstance in this piece, frieda. the theme is dark yet heartfelt. i am so glad to see you around once again. wish you well always! =)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much gabrielle, glad to be back and seeing you on my page. :-)

[Rita L. Sev]

When a loved one becomes a stranger, we must reintroduce our love to them - as many times as it takes... I feel the frustration here, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I know, being a parent means being tireless, thanks Rita, enjoy every second with your kiddos while they're young and you still have some reasonable facsimile of control!

[SyberRose]

You conveyed a very stressful...frustrating situation...and a manifestation of emotions...
heartfelt indeed...hugss

[Frieda P]

Very stressful and extremely frustrating Rose, thanks so much for your kindness.

[Angi]

Oh Frieda, I hope, hope he gets on a straighter path soon. Hugs, darlin'. Angi~

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Angi, his intentions are always sincere but he's enslaved by that freaking addiction which seems to win over each time...much appreciate your thoughts here my friend.