Boiling Point

Another day dawned...

demanding a meed of flesh and blood

bones shattered under the pressure of the sun

purging the old and undertaken view

harmful toxins waited in the shade

til moon came out to play

stick a needle in your eye

step on all the cracks

break your mother's back

child's play grew up to be a cruelty 

in disguise of white candy crap

took the stranger in while looking for a solution

brain on fire, bubbled over on my skin

what is the boiling point of mind over matter?

Reviews

[s y e]

"stick a needle in your eye
step on all the cracks
break your mother's back"

Oooooh flip flops, love! This is a dark, powerful write. A lot of really vivid lines that make you go ouch! Ha, This is another outstanding write from you. I don't think the darkness would ever leave us fully, we just kind of get used to it being there, we have so much in our mind that it is weighing us down and yet, we still try and remain strong for others around us.

~ Noodlebumble ~~

[Frieda P]

Wooo another flip flops from Sye....made my night! x

[icelandicblue]

I just don't know what temperature that is but I can feel the heat from the flame through cyber space. An evocative piece that is cleverly written.

[Leslie Philibert]

this is clever, the use of verbs to introduce the phrases...good idea !

[DCT ponderings]

Frieda intense, dark and imploring. When everything just gets to be too much and we want to escape. Everyone has a method to use to go unconscious to life. I Absolutely love the last line. what is the boiling point of mind over matter? I think for most things somewhere between our will and need to feel pain free.

[ANTO]

It is hard just to get out of bed some days Frieda and I suppose thats when it is most important to make the effort, even when the reward for such gargantuan effort seems little.
You describe the feelings that pervade such days so vividly here.
Keep on keeping on my friend
X

[TL Boehm]

the monsters are real. Addictions, craves, predation waits for innocent souls and those who survive - carry puncture wounds from their teeth.

[Kristin Lee]

I really enjoyed this one. It made me think of Halloween and all the gory things that lurk in the shadows that time of year...but then again they are there all the time, we just think of them more often that time of year. Masterfully penned. And I loved your closing question.

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful dark write.. had me sitting on the edge of my seat reading.. eerie! But I love it nonetheless.

[Frieda P]

This is one of those that basically wrote itself, you know how that happens, thanks Lori.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Found via my news feed. The last line is classic.

You should copyright it, no wait you did.

[Frieda P]

I'm glad you happened upon my page Kenneth, thanks so much.

[Derek Nall]

What is the boiling point of mind over matter, captivating thought...

[Frieda P]

I wonder if there's an answer, thanks Derek...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes it all gets to be too much...and just one more thing can push us over the edge.

[Frieda P]

Exactly, thanks jacob.