Sleep, If You Dare

nightmares or reality...?

Sleep, yes go to sleep

so you can visit that hell again

when the night arrests your breath

until it's nothing but a whimper 

it comes again to rape your soul

leaves merely a reeling shell  

madness in being buried alive

are they nightmare or memories

a blend of blood's spilling guts

twisting  entrails till they fail

bleeding the heart, sucking it flaccid

neurons flashing in neon putrid green,

deep repulsive murky shadows of inky ebony

pulsating to the beat of slicing knives momentum

they don't hide in the closet or under the bed

these are the true monsters in your head, as the un-dead

take a chance on some zzz's tonight

if you're really lucky, perhaps you will wake...

Author's Note

*artwork by Star

Reviews

[Angel]

Boy, am I glad I was too tired to review last night!!!!!
I would have hated to have this poem be the last thing I read before I turned out the lights!!
Shades of H. P. Lovecraft, girl, this one is SCARY!!!!!!

brrrrrrrrr....

is it cold in here????

[Tai Ryens]

To die in the midst of a nightmare would be to spare me from the horrors of reality. I quite enjoyed this, 'tis interesting.

[Just Kim]

such an interesting read, enjoyed

[Cassie]

You have expressed it so well. Good job frieda

[Angi]

No way am I going to bed if all that is waiting for me. Coffee's on. Wanna cup? Angi~

[Dana Alsamsam]

this is such a beautifully dark representation of a living nightmare! i love how versatile you are with the subject matter and vibe of your work- always different, surprising and amazing!

my suggestion for you would be to cut down some of the adjective use a bit to clear up your images:
"neurons flashing in neon putrid green,
deep repulsive murky shadows of inky ebony"
these lines have a few too many words to take in, but are still beautiful images.

i really loved these lines:
"they don't hide in the closet or under the bed
these are the true monsters in your head, as the un-dead"
this is a dark and genius play on words! great job!

[kublakhan27]

I'm at loss for words, I don't even know how to feel about it. though there are a million options in my head...I can only wince at the viciousness of it all, and for the record, there is no such thing as a bad wince when I'm reading xo

[Onku Ghosh]

After reading your poem it will be difficult for anyone to sleep without conjuring up the scary images that you have portrayed so well in your write.
FReida, why don't you see the world in a different perspective...........It isn't such a bad place after all.

[Deron Alexis]

http://farm7.staticflickr.com/6109/6374189483_66d9a2e41c_z.jpg
makes sense not to sleep why go back to that

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Nice change of pace read here... great job as usual.