The Drowning Pool

The Drowning Pool

A Poem by Frieda P

drowning in emotions of deceit & despair
  you waded in taking chance we'd go under
       held my head til tiny bubbles appeared
i swallowed heart not to feel the pain
   rushing  inhales made it hard to see
    through the dizzying whirlpool of  twisted lies
          your guilt burnt my fused eyelids
i dove in the deep end of abstract remission
   only to drown in your bawdy transgressions
         truth surfaced to find a lifeless repose
            repast held without honor of mourning
there was no burial, no flowers, not a tear shed
        just an empty casket that encased your heart

© 2013 Frieda P


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Our relationships are strange. Karina pointed out to me recently that because of my low opinion of myself I have allowed myself to get into relationships that were not healthy just because I was grateful someone cared. Maybe this is too common? As always a crafted free verse piece.

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

You, a low opinion of yourself? I find that hard to believe John.....thanks!
John Alexander McFadyen

11 Years Ago

Strange how we come over to others and how we use mental defence mechanisms to swim through the swam.. read more



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Sometimes relationships are sink or swim and we find ourselves drowning. Keeping a relationship afloat can be exhausting. I like the metaphor here. It's very relatable and so similar by conparison to the struggles of treading water. All the effort only to stay in the same place. I like this one. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Love this metaphor with water. You can float in it or you can drown. So many dualities in life...

Posted 11 Years Ago


i dove in the deep end of abstract remission...beautiful!

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is terrifyingly solemn, Frieda, you sure have a knack for tying the right words to that stunning thought process of yours. I've missed reading your emotional reads, with lines like "I dove in the deep end of your abstract remission", it's a wonder you are still writing here, and not off with a fancy publisher! Well done dear friend

Posted 11 Years Ago


Such melancholy Frieda, intensely powerful and with the last lines I was rendered speechless.
there was no burial, no flowers, not a tear shed
just an empty casket that encased your heart


Posted 11 Years Ago


A sad and beautiful poem. When heart is dead and bury. We can feel like death. Powerful description gave life and vision to your words. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Filled with sadness, but so beautifully written. Excellent piece Frieda. (:

Posted 11 Years Ago


Some interesting wordplay here Frieda, and a further fleshing out of your emotions creating a more tempered and tragically beautiful tale. Good stuff.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I am in love with that title

Posted 11 Years Ago


regimented in immortality in this dart flowing piece...great work

Posted 11 Years Ago



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If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..

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