Relentless Weather Patterns

let's talk about the weather instead

You wanna talk about the weather, 

            when I can't see the light

dust devils in my basement, 

                   tropical cyclone in the attic

first floor is flooded by a blood tsunami

             with the parting of the red seas

ran upstairs to avoid the chaos of the current

     hurricanes  shattered and battered the mirrors

so much to say and my voice box is contained

                   in the cirrus clouds of a ballerina

spinning round and round in the closet

                    on that setup in the eye of the storm

Author's Note

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

okay, to me...not really talking about a storm here at all...


more like a pent up conversation being avoided, but sooner or later it is going to become such a storm, all will be destroyed..

a little rain at a time is better than holding it in...

such a good write...the metaphor held tightly from beginning to end.

[Frieda P]

Open up my head and let me out....you got it jacob, thanks so much!

[kublakhan27]

"Put a candle in the window, cuz I feel I've got to move" I usually don't single out your work for my library for the simple reason that your entire catalogue is worthy of my library, but this one is going in...I'm not sure if the weather is a friend or foe here, but that could simply be my own perceptions of the weather talking...so much to say and my voice box is contained...that line speaks to me on the deepest level, and of course, the musical accompaniment is perfect...to paraphrase a bit of it, I have the disc but haven't listened to it in a long long time...I never learned to swim because I have a fear of deep water...only poetry keeps me afloat, especially yours my dear friend.

[Frieda P]

You always humble me with your reviews my sweet friend, you're too kind Steve! xo

[kublakhan27]

I speak from the heart always, as you know Frieda :) xo

[Frieda P]

I know love, and I muchly appreciate you :-) xo

[kublakhan27]

:) xoxoxoxo...if I have to spend ten characters, what better to spend them on? ;)

[Frieda P]

Awh...doing the happy dance xoxoxo

[kublakhan27]

It's always good news hearing that...stay off the tables now ;)

[Frieda P]

pssh what fun it that?! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

No fun if I'm not around ;)

[kublakhan27]

No fun if I'm not around ;)

[emmajoy]

To create beauty from a mess of thoughts and emotions takes a lot of doing but, if anyone can do it, tis you! Seems whatever the metaphorical weather does, the strong somehow swim through it ..not happily, but ..survive whatever. You do, but the storm leaves it mark, love.

[Frieda P]

What a lovely review my dear petulia...thanks so much for your sweet thoughts here, mwah! x

[SyberRose]

a very creative and well crafted piece Frieda as always....Enjoyed...Rose

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rose, so happy you enjoyed this one :-)

[s y e]

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(just incase my fancy fonts dont work, LOL xD)

I love how you can tell a clear vivid story, Frifri. It shows how talented and how much passion you put into your writes.

This is supercalifragilisticexpialidocious

~ Noodle.

[Frieda P]

Your fancy fonts worked, so I got two for the price of one, wooo! Grazie mille love!

[s y e]

Yay! So glad it did, tried to so a special review, LOL.

[Quill~]

Girl, I have dust devils everywhere, it's a crazy storm at my house!
I'll have to get the duster out pretty soon... thanks for the reminder! lol :P
The song is upbeat, and motivating.... your write is fun! :)

[Frieda P]

Haha dust devils are actually clouds but I guess it works both ways, thanks Quill! :-)

[Leandro Mendez]

nice piece Frieda, and by the way you write we can tell you have a lot to say :)

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, what are you trying to say Leandro? ;-)

[Leandro Mendez]

let me put it like this: if you would live forever, there wouldn't be enough ink for the rest of us. hahahah but now is all digital anyway, but i still use the pen first.

[Rita L. Sev]

"hurricanes shattered and battered the mirrors.."

What storms of life do to our image of self... Powerful write, Frieda, with a spot-on metaphor.

[Frieda P]

Ain't that the truth, thanks Rita.

[Sami Khalil]

I thought I was watching the weather channel then I realizes it was a great poem...:)

[Frieda P]

Hahaha smarty pants! Thanks ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

I knew you will laugh at this one...You are welcome...:)

[Frieda P]

Do I need to pay you for the laugh therapy? ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

No. Just a smile for a friend ...:)

[Frieda P]

Grazie ;-) ................................this is so annoying.

[Sami Khalil]

Grazie Mille...:)
There is a bug of sorts...:)

[Frieda P]

25 characters is pointless, I don't see the sense in it at all.............

[Sami Khalil]

That is why I'm using dots until they fix it...:)

[Pete Langley]

This, hun, is a wow wow wow for the Frieda Reader!!! Perfectly cohesive and complete isobars! A whirlwind of a poem, clever clogs! P.

[Frieda P]

Holy cats, three wow's...you made my entire week sweet pea...those clogs are tough to dance in though ;-) Thanks dear Pete.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow an intense and wonderfully penned depiction of turmoil. As always perfect metaphors strung together with the craft of a poetess!

[Frieda P]

Wow, I got a wow, I'm jazzed John, thanks muchly!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Now do not be so crass my Lady I have given thou many a wow in our time in this coffee house!

[Frieda P]

Don't make me fall out of love with you John. ;-)