~When You Leapt

Your butterfly wings twisted 

                    by fate & obscurity

               plummeting into the grand abyss

             you took my heart with you when you leapt

                           hanging by a thread was no way to go

left behind memories, secrets and pain

         now divided by death I can't help but wonder

was there peace in your decision to fall?

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think anyone who has had a loved one take their own life asked such questions... you will go crazy living with them unanswered, but you need to find peace by keeping them alive in your heart.

Have you ever heard "A Tout Le Monde" by Megadeth... if not check it out.

[Frieda P]

Only listened to it about a thousand times in that immediate time following the sadness....thanks Dale.

[Sue Hart]

The poem reflect that feeling of loss and bafflement. I too lost a family member through suicide. My stepdad took his life when my mother died. He couldn't live with the loss. I still wonder today at the reasons why. I had spoken to him the day before with little warning of his plans.
Your poem does indeed, touch me and gives comfort too. Thanks.

[Frieda P]

Sorry to hear that, it's a pain like no other, left with many questions and wondering if you could have done something to prevent it, my sister seemed fine that day too. Thanks for sharing your thoughts here...

[Sue Hart]

I'm glad you listened and understood. Today I look at death differently. Not really an end, but a new beginning and I hope it gives them that.

[Frieda P]

Sigh, one can only hope, still I wish she was still her, selfish perhaps.

[Sue Hart]

Never selfish. Factual. We miss loved ones that have passed over.

[s y e]

" plummeting into the grand abyss
you took my heart with you when you leapt"

Your emotions are raw in this write, as always. A great job! There is questions in your write that I'm sure we all ask ourselves everyday. It's a sad touching write, sorry for your loss.

[Frieda P]

I know I ask myself the same questions over and over, each and every day, this is what's left behind when someone cherished takes their own life, thanks Sye.

[Misillusions]

Artists can take a tragedy and make it sound beautiful!
An excellent example of this,

Thank you for this beautifully tragic art piece

[Frieda P]

Thank you MIsillusions, muchly appreciate your visit & kind words.

[Traci]

Such an honest write, full of raw emotion. Hard to read knowing the heartache and pain, and sense of wonder you deal with daily. So many questions, so few answers. Writing from such a deep place within takes great strength and courage, for that I applaud you my friend. You may never get the answers you need, but may you always be comforted in your sweet memories and wonderful times you two shared together. Much love to you always, my friend.

[Frieda P]

Your kind response has touched my heart Traci, it's my way of coping and keeping her spirit alive I suppose, it's self preservation at best, thanks so much my dear friend.

[Traci]

Always a pleasure to read your work, Frieda. She will always be alive in your heart and through your precious words of love and longing to understand.

[Frieda P]

You guys get to share my memories and angst, it's a taboo subject in my family, no one mentions her name....thanks again Traci, much appreciated.

[Traci]

Unfortunately it's that way in many families. I think it's a beautiful thing that the love you have for your sister shines above and beyond her actions. You may never understand her pain, but your lovely soul is exposed, as you forgive and move on, and that is inspiring. She is a part of you, and you are a part of us here at WC, we will always share your memories and angst, Frieda.

[Tai Ryens]

`Hanging by a thread was no way to go`
Wonderful way to symbolize the ties that you just can't snip; for the idea of pain upon hitting the floor beneath would be too much to bear..

[Frieda P]

Some threads are eternal, thanks Tai....

[Kristin Lee]

This almost brought tears to my ears. The imagery and the description created a picture of such darkness and heartache...Although I agree with the final line...you always wonder.

[Frieda P]

Always, thanks so much Kristin, I know you get this one....

[papermush08]

"was there peace in your decision to fall?"
I love the vague meaning in this line.

[Frieda P]

Grazie Mille PaperMush.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. You went deep into many things. We never know what the ending will be? Life is chance. We can fall or swim in happiness. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

Yes John, the falling is the hard part, thanks for your thoughts here.

[Sid]

Touching write. I have come back to WC after a long break and I just had to read your work and as always I'm glad i did. I don't think questions related to suicide can ever be answered no matter how hard we try and the impact it has on the people left behind is heavy. Very nice write, touching!

[Frieda P]

Wow, what a charming review sid_yadav, and welcome back....I'm so jazzed by your review, thanks so much.

[Astro]

Reason obscured not by a thin veil as some might think but by the grand divide. Suicide takes with it so much more than life, and what it leaves is heavy. None so heavy as the pressing or, depressing questions unanswered. This is a tear jerker Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Exactly Astro, I feel as though you've been touched by this personally, thanks so much for your insightful review.

[Astro]

You are most welcome.