Wrecked

Wrecked

A Poem by Frieda P
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The 'I Never Learn Syndrome'

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I know we used to dance before you wrecked me
             was a little piece of heaven and a lot of hell
amazing how quickly the fires of forever after dim
          you came inside my head and  burnt my senses
my own crucifixion wasn't satisfying enough
        you hammered in the nails until you drew blood
like a boomerang you hit my heart again
          how many times is enough is enough
I'm broken, you break me yet again
         there were those bolts of clarity
they fizzled out after the raging storm
          bohemian gusts set the temperature
there was no grace except for 
         suns on the horizon as you thought they should be,
worshiping at the altar of your temporal ego 
          when will I learn you loved yourself more than me

© 2013 Frieda P


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A very clever writing, Frieda. Some people need a little more "growing up" to do before they can sustain a mature relationship, others still - never learn to truly love... life it is a paradox at times.
"when will I learn you loved yourself more than me" love the line! Funny story I am trying to put to poetic form. If I can manage it, I will post soon. I tell ya... this past weekend was full of all kinds of stuff coming out of the blue - must be something in the water! :)
Lovely writing - as always!




Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha those are the best stories, when is this coming to a theater near me? ;-)
Emerald Seas

11 Years Ago

Ha, if I'm brave (because he'll never be on this site) I may actually post the picture(s) he sent me.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Oh my, shaking my head and rolling my eyes, simultaneously, can't wait! Laughing here... ;-P


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Well portrayed the one sidedness of a relationship doomed to drown. One thing I have learnt recently is that if you are a giver you need a giver to balance you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Now you tell me.....
John Alexander McFadyen

11 Years Ago

Hey I only just found out myself lol!
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

LOL
boy isn't this the truth.
no grace except for
suns on the horizon as you thought they should be,
worshiping at the altar of your temporal ego

that's exactly how it goes. Well penned

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha apparently you know, thanks TL!
Love is but an aura of deception sometimes and a disguise to our hearts...Nicely done Frieda...:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Rose, much appreciated. :-)
Highly intellectual piece that reads like an instruction, well done my love, great read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha, if there's instructions then I'm not following. ;-)
Biting and sad. We never truly know what someone's agenda might be and when it is revealed in our vulnerability they have the power to kill us again and again.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Yep, our own vulnerability will get us every time, thanks blue....
REally sad, but in our 'human' societies people get used to harming others and if they are given the chances again and again it becomes a routine for them. Very masterfully expressed, really very good.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Grazie mille :-)
Sadly this happens, but happily, if we learn from it. Very nice my friend.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

'If' the operative word here.....
We yearn so much for love that we see it where there is only a shadow - and the shadows are only too happy to exploit this. Penned to perfection, Frieda!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Oooh, doing a happy dance to your review, thanks Rita!
Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

:)
Frieda.. sadly this is a lesson we have to learn first hand to be able to build fences...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha I think I've been president of the I Never Learn Club since a past life....thanks Stella.
A very clever writing, Frieda. Some people need a little more "growing up" to do before they can sustain a mature relationship, others still - never learn to truly love... life it is a paradox at times.
"when will I learn you loved yourself more than me" love the line! Funny story I am trying to put to poetic form. If I can manage it, I will post soon. I tell ya... this past weekend was full of all kinds of stuff coming out of the blue - must be something in the water! :)
Lovely writing - as always!




Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha those are the best stories, when is this coming to a theater near me? ;-)
Emerald Seas

11 Years Ago

Ha, if I'm brave (because he'll never be on this site) I may actually post the picture(s) he sent me.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Oh my, shaking my head and rolling my eyes, simultaneously, can't wait! Laughing here... ;-P

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