Imagistic Embrace

A metaphorical pause deep within

a space crowded of forbidden fruits

somewhat like your lips before we touched

a bit of shine, and a lick of lust-er

you polished my fantasy quite risque

revelations when the phantom has spoken

no illustrative embraces to shake

mere chimera of my mind's play

unaware, you brazenly materialized

tango'd til dawning of brazen daylight

releasing the angels of confession

around the fire of inconsistent guilt

couldn't live up to the luminous parable

sublime written lines, twisted of darkly fate

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

forbidden fruits
somewhat like your lips before we touched
a bit of shine, and a lick of lust-er
you polished my fantasy quite risque

You know me - I find something and just settle on it....savoring it. Rolling it around - a dog with a ball - nomming it till its slobbery....And today its those lines above - I just like 'em. I do.

[Frieda P]

Gawd I love your reviews, did I tell you that already, thanks, muchly appreciated!

[Vikrantsingh]

Wonderful poem Frieda :)
Loved it :)

[Frieda P]

Grazie mille Singh :-)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I adore you dignified place of wording and guides one to help themselves to gorge, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Jazzed by your review love, thanks so much.

[Jack...]

Once more your words, your thoughts, the depth of your being spellbinds me. What might be forbidden may very well be what is needed. For the fruit that seems so dangerous to have usually turns out to be the most delicious of all. The more I read you the more amazed I become. Always it is one of my greatest pleasures to spend some time wandering around your magical brain.

[Frieda P]

Wow Jack, I hardly know what to say, thank you from the bottom of my poetic heart.

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

Great wordplay here. loads of emotion too.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for your visit and review Valormore.

[Astro]

Your colorful words swallow me whole as I slide over curves and fall through your lines Frieda. There are a couple of spots that I found tricky though, that I personally, might alter slightly here is my suggestion.
"a space crowded of forbidden fruits" here I would say 'crowded with or among forbidden fruits" I just think it sounds more appropriate.
and in this last line,
"sublime written lines, twisted of darkly fate" I would say, "of a twisted and darkly fate" but that's just me and these are only suggestions. Still enjoyed the taste of your imaginings.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Astro, always appreciate your thoughts and suggestions.

[Rita L. Sev]

Forbidden fruit, sublime and dark... I love the words you choose, Frieda - combinations that no one has ever thought of before, but upon reading we all say, "Yes! That's exactly right!" The last line has a sort of Poe quality to its rhythm.

[Frieda P]

Love your review Rita, you're too kind, thanks so much.

[Rita L. Sev]

Not too kind - just honest! :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Forbidden fruit is the sweetest kind, unless you get caught.

[Marie]

It's the spice of possibly being caught that makes it so sweet.

[Frieda P]

Ha listen to Marie go...thanks Mark.

[Leandro Mendez]

enchanted from the first line! amazing writing :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Leandro, love the word 'enchanted' :-)

[Leandro Mendez]

i still am

[Archangel Gabriel]

As always Freida you weave your magic chains of words into interesting concepts. Steve liked the first four lines best I the final four!

[Frieda P]

Ha between the two of you I've got a complete work, thanks Gabriel.