Music Senryu

Senryu challenge by New Yawk Steve

Satisfaction~The Rolling Stones

No girly action

even the devil knew my game

satisfaction sucks

Landslide~Fleetwood Mac

Saw my reflection

life changes of my  seasons

afraid of falling

Like A Rolling Stone~Bob Dylan

I used to be fine

now I have to compromise

on my own, unknown

Summertime~Janis Joplin

Living is breezy

no tears for the weary rich

No one can harm you

Jack & Diane~John Mellencamp

Two kids rocking on

beat goes on after it fizzles 

changes to real life

Born in the USA~Bruce Springsteen

Born American

made me kill my fellow man

Dark red, white & blue 

Nights In White Satin~Moody Blue

Hear black emptiness

Letters written, never sent

yet, still I love you

Kinks~You Really Got Me

I can't sleep at night

no clue what I am doing

you really got me

Sweet Child O'Mine~Guns & Roses

Her hair safe and warm

recalling sweet childhood

where do we go now?

A Thousand Kisses Deep~Leonard Cohen!

Streak runs a while

Seems real, yet boogie defeat

Kisses my soul deep

Reviews

[Zahra]

Amazing collection of senryu, masterfully done.
I used to be fine

now I have to compromise

on my own, unknown
Very nice

[Frieda P]

So glad you enjoyed them, thank you muchly.

[Ency Bearis]

Astute write with those lovely songs, remarkable senryu.

[Frieda P]

Thank you kind sir, much appreciated Ency.

[Izabe143]

I like that. To me music is my voice so I wrote songs I'm going to start publishing them soon than bring them to life. This was amazing and I hope to see more. I'm going to send you a friend request.😝

[Frieda P]

Thanks Isabella.

[Izabe143]

Your welcome. 😝

[Marie]

Nice lyrics...you should have been a song writer...

[Frieda P]

I wish, thanks Marie.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

all such good songs, and i love the twist you did on the lyrics to make these clever senryus up...

love em.

[Frieda P]

Thanks jacob, harder than I thought to condense those lyrics so they make sense in so few words, glad you enjoyed it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are so versatile....can write just about anything...i admire that talent...

[Frieda P]

You're much too kind jacob, I admire your work so, that' means a lot to me, thank you.

[Rebecca Buller]

This is so cool, Frieda! Don't tell, but I actually had to look up the definition of 'senryu.' So many incredible artists! But my favorite would have to be Springsteen's "Born in the USA." I might have to try my own senryu:)

[Frieda P]

I didn't know what a Senryu was until I got to this site either, they're fun, trying to condense your thoughts in succinct lines that way, and challenging....thanks Rebecca. :-)

[Rebecca Buller]

You're welcome:-)

[Frieda P]

Let me know when you try one. :-)

[Rebecca Buller]

I will, Frieda:-) :-)

[Mark]

An interesting idea... beloved artists all and a nice tribute to some of their music. I like how you ended with LC... saving the best for last. :)

[Frieda P]

Ha you know it...big Cohen fan, thanks Mark. :-)

[Mark]

Me too, though I have to confess I didn't know he existed until I saw Shrek LOL I wrote a poem inspired by him.

[Frieda P]

Haven't we all, he's the # 1 poet in my book, will have to check it out, send me RR Mark.

[Stella Armour]

I like it even better now....

[Frieda P]

Woo, mission acccomplished! :-)

[Stella Armour]

a job well done :o)

[Frieda P]

Merci beacoup madame. :-)

[Stella Armour]

de rien..

[Frieda P]

:-) That's a new one on me, hey I'm Italiano Lol, and congrats on top writer Stella...!

[Stella Armour]

haha..it's french, thank you Frieda

[Stella Armour]

and where may i ask is "our man" among these lovely senryu?

[Frieda P]

Laughing here, you know I thought of that last night, and then my computer died on me, BSOD, I'm working on it! ;-)

[Stella Armour]

haha...that's ok then :o)

[Frieda P]

He's so deep, hard to condense his words, how's that??

[Stella Armour]

that his him PERFECT!

[Frieda P]

Wow, he's perfect!

[SyberRose]

Great job Frieda...I will have to try one soon...I love all of those entertainers...:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks Rose, glad you enjoyed it. :-)