~Enchanted Moon Trance

       Enchanted by a moon trance 

in your eyes

    starry stratospheres 

          take on sparkling hues

       wafting violaceous diamonds

                    of lapis lazuli

         streaming beautiful music

             in its radiance

cello's playing whimsy 

                 with a prolific message

          strumming across my heart stings

striking old love chords

                     tuning harmonious notes

      beating in my chest 

                  a bumble of flutterbys

              wonder if these butterflies

                                  could be true

                  you make my soul tremble and sigh,

                 would you leave me bluer 

                              than the azure skies

Author's Note

Reviews

[ANTO]

Like Noodlehead I am a sucka for moon and stars pieces. I also would have came here anyway because I thought I saw Raquel minus the fur in the poem photo... ;)
I love how the subject is so enchanted that they are ready to fall in love yet at the back of their mind (and the end of the poem) theres that niggling doubt -
"would you leave me bluer
than the azure skies"
I also liked the use of the cello device because it has to be the most sexual of the orchestra's instruments which adds to the eroticism.
Very hott Frieda P - nice poem too - oh Im sorry, I'll behave...
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[Frieda P]

Never behave on my account, and pssh Raquel, I used my own pic Lol...thanks Antnee, so jazzed you liked this one, and I love 2 Cellos, yes they do have a way of making it sound more erotic....

[ANTO]

I knew it was your pic all along Frieda. Re the cello link with eroticism - Im pretty sure it must be because of their shape - they're like the way the Rat Pack would have described a 'dame' with the hands drawing the hour-glass shape and with the wolf whistle accompaniment. Phewiit Pheww { }

[Frieda P]

Hahaha you're a riot Antnee! I happen to love that Rat Pack, and dame was so perfect, sure do miss Frankie....my best friend's father used to listen to him all the time and whenever I went there we were inundated with him, thought he was corny at the time as we were Beatles, Stones fan, but now I see the fascination.

[ANTO]

B'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)read moreB'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)
Jeez - I have to lay of the coffee or you have to get a new profile pick coz I could have swore that your image just waved at me lolol
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[Frieda P]

Nope, no one could ever replace those guys....!

[ANTO]

Goodnight Frieda P Longstocking
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[Frieda P]

Ha another new name, sweet dreams! x

[Leandro Mendez]

speechless, this is so well put and I'm amazed :)

[Frieda P]

You're too kind Leandro, thanks so much.

[prashant harsh]

m big fan of yours hats off :)

[Frieda P]

Woo, jazzed by your review, thanks prashant ;-)

[SteveB]

Nicely done!
I have always been a fan of alliteration and you did it so well here. And then the final question at the end suggestive of a wiser heart who has known the butterflies and realizes that sometimes the buzzing is actually from a bee that could sting.
The musical references were played well - never cliche. I particularly enjoyed the cello and whimsy. Given the tone of the instrument a wonderful counterpoint.

[Frieda P]

Yes, those dang bees, thanks Steve.

[lee von cleef]

so worried about the end, when the sky is just cracking dawn,come on jump in the truck we have collected plenty of squirrels for the nuts.

[Frieda P]

Smiling here :-)

[Tai Ryens]

If only you were dark-skinned, in order to cleverly play with the lines once more: "How could a man be so black and blue?"
I was always fond of that line, as I am fond of this poem. Well done!

[Frieda P]

Thank you kindly Tai!

[Another Poet]

I really love this one. I enjoyed this poem. And very beautiful music!

[Frieda P]

I'm thrilled you did Random Poet, thanks.

[Another Poet]

your welcome:)

[Ken Simm.]

Music inspired but beyond into the thoughts that particular music inspires. Gentle and lace like so acoustic music. These are thoughts to a soundtrack of thinking.

[Frieda P]

'Soundtrack of thinking' I may just steal that from you Ken, thank you my sweet friend.

[Ken Simm.]

With my blessing Frieda.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

This is real music in its making. The imagery is well captured. Should your heart stings in this musicality, I wonder why. The poem is good.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Onyia-ota, grazie mille.

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chukwuebuka Benson]

You are highly welcome.

[Kristin Lee]

Beautiful color hidden within its melancholy nature. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed it Kristin.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This one has real colour to it as you read. It is melancholy in it's gentle tone. A melody of a poem

[Frieda P]

You're too kind John, thanks muchly.