~Enchanted Moon Trance

       Enchanted by a moon trance 

in your eyes

    starry stratospheres 

          take on sparkling hues

       wafting violaceous diamonds

                    of lapis lazuli

         streaming beautiful music

             in its radiance

cello's playing whimsy 

                 with a prolific message

          strumming across my heart stings

striking old love chords

                     tuning harmonious notes

      beating in my chest 

                  a bumble of flutterbys

              wonder if these butterflies

                                  could be true

                  you make my soul tremble and sigh,

                 would you leave me bluer 

                              than the azure skies

Author's Note

Reviews

[ANTO]

Like Noodlehead I am a sucka for moon and stars pieces. I also would have came here anyway because I thought I saw Raquel minus the fur in the poem photo... ;)
I love how the subject is so enchanted that they are ready to fall in love yet at the back of their mind (and the end of the poem) theres that niggling doubt -
"would you leave me bluer
than the azure skies"
I also liked the use of the cello device because it has to be the most sexual of the orchestra's instruments which adds to the eroticism.
Very hott Frieda P - nice poem too - oh Im sorry, I'll behave...
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[Frieda P]

Never behave on my account, and pssh Raquel, I used my own pic Lol...thanks Antnee, so jazzed you liked this one, and I love 2 Cellos, yes they do have a way of making it sound more erotic....

[ANTO]

I knew it was your pic all along Frieda. Re the cello link with eroticism - Im pretty sure it must be because of their shape - they're like the way the Rat Pack would have described a 'dame' with the hands drawing the hour-glass shape and with the wolf whistle accompaniment. Phewiit Pheww { }

[Frieda P]

Hahaha you're a riot Antnee! I happen to love that Rat Pack, and dame was so perfect, sure do miss Frankie....my best friend's father used to listen to him all the time and whenever I went there we were inundated with him, thought he was corny at the time as we were Beatles, Stones fan, but now I see the fascination.

[ANTO]

B'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)read moreB'Jaysus Frieda yes.. those guys had style in buckets. No one can touch them these days. IMHO(tep)
Jeez - I have to lay of the coffee or you have to get a new profile pick coz I could have swore that your image just waved at me lolol
X

[Frieda P]

Nope, no one could ever replace those guys....!

[ANTO]

Goodnight Frieda P Longstocking
X

[Frieda P]

Ha another new name, sweet dreams! x

[s y e]

" strumming across my heart stings
striking old love chords
tuning harmonious notes
beating in my chest "

D'awww I loved this! The music was perfect for the write and the write was amazing, you know I love the moon and stars so just the title dragged me in but this was out standing!

You have so many powerful lines and your imagery is amazing!

[Acucena G.]

i love it , fabulously done.

[Mariya]

Enchanting- love, trance and the moon. The moon goddess would be honored.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Lady Veleda, so glad you enjoyed this one.

[ClaudiaVonDoom]

I live in that trance.

[Frieda P]

Lucky you...

[TL Boehm]

starry stratospheres
take on sparkling hues

starry stratospheres....love that!

[Frieda P]

Thanks TL, glad you enjoyed it.

[Rebecca Buller]

"cello's playing whimsy
with a prolific message
strumming across my heart stings
stiking old love chords"

Simply beautiful. I love the moon and I love music. This was the perfect fit, Frieda. I'm enchanted:)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Rebecca, love 2 Cellos, glad you were enchanted! ;-)

[Rebecca Buller]

You're welcome, and 2 Cellos is awesome:-)

[Frieda P]

We should be so lucky in our craft, they went from playing on the streets to viral on youtube, overnight successes!

[Rebecca Buller]

LOL!! Behold the power of Youtube:-)

[Zahra]

A beautiful and effective piece from a gifted poet. :) Really nice, Frieda. Loved it.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, humbled by your words. :-)

[Zahra]

My Pleasure! :)

[Pete Langley]

This is real reciprocal poetry, Frieda. I loved both pieces, music and poetry....and the pizzicato in both the cello and your `heart stings`. Excellent work, honey. P.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Pete, means a lot to me, and I love that word 'pizzicato', thrilled!