~Passing Shadows

I remember you,

  you stole my breath away

           and never gave it back

your imprint lingers

           on my soul like a wafting tattoo

silly notions come to mind,

   your  piercing eyes that held me like hot fiery coals

 the way you used to weave your fingers through my hair & tug gently,

 you held my face and traced my lips 

            with your fingertips in a figure eight for infinity

your musky scent in the middle of the night 

                             when you woke frisky in the mood

the way you said my name, 

          made it sound like no other had ever spoken it before

            I've not heard it quite the same way since

you were gone in an instant and all that is left,

                       an intoxicating trance of you upon my heart

sometimes in the middle of a still night, I think I hear you call to me

                  but it's merely a wisp of a flutter floating~

                           passing  through me as a sweet shadow of reminiscence

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

the way you said my name,
made it sound like no other had ever spoken it before

I've not heard it quite the same way since

Sometimes its the beautiful, deep and different words you use that I gravitate to. And sometimes its the simple statement that just blows me away. Amazing how your name sounds when some one you love speaks it...

[Frieda P]

Thanks for this glowing review TL, much appreciate it.

[Ruth]

Such nostalgia! Beautifully described, touched my heart xx

[Astro]

"wisp of a flutter floating-" I imagine cold sweats and tangled sheets when I think of hearing my name in the night, but you Frieda gracefully weave your words into poetic reminiscence. Very nice. Was this person your Gigolo that danced like he was a crackhead? lol.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I have to say, this piece held me right to the end, a guided and relatable prose that sooths the mind.

[Entropy of the mind]

beautiful, made my heart ache.
I love the word choice, the poem just flows like mist coming of the asphalt.
Brought back many memories.
Amazing.

[prashant harsh]

superb

[Frieda P]

Grazie milli, prashant.

[Onku Ghosh]

wonderfully penned thoughts! I just loved it The last para is amazingly beautiful and apt.

[Frieda P]

Thanks Onku, muchly appreciate your thoughts.

[FJ Davis]

Had Wonderman stayed, would you now be writing gorgeous odes to him and the glory of his lovemaking?
More likely, you'd be composing stinging light verse deriding him for a myriad of irritating personal traits.
In romantic relationships, what we possess--virtually, control--we soon resent and eventually lose interest in; what we want, that somehow slips from our grasp, we desire forever.
Take it to the bank, Frieda!--I majored in "Love's Quirks and Dysfunctions."

[Frieda P]

First off, 'Wonderman' made me giggle, and 'stinging light verse' moi? Ha....thanks so much for your insightful review Frank....

[kublakhan27]

I feel lonely just reading this...a devastatingly beautiful piece my dear xo

[Frieda P]

Awh, thanks sweet Steve. xo

[kublakhan27]

Always a pleasure Frieda :) xo

[Frieda P]

Is this the real you? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

This is me ;)

[Frieda P]

Benji, Steve or that new character? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Probably Steve cuz I'm so broody these days ;P

[Frieda P]

Ha no worries, first we take Manhattan, then we're off ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Sounds like a plan ;)

[Frieda P]

Not sure about Berlin though, was thinking of a better B place. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

;D

[lee von cleef]

Like hot fiery coals ?

[Frieda P]

Ha, yes you know, those hot piercing orbs....

[lee von cleef]

orbs the children of Roy, the tasseled peaks spinning counter clockwise, Twins though one is slightly smaller.( you get slapped if you notice) and ribbed if you don't, this is going no where fast....

[s y e]

Woah, this was stunning. This write was just brought to life! It was amazing! I felt it all ~ the ache, the yearning, the loss and mostly, the uninvited memory.

"your imprint lingers
on my soul like a wafting tattoo
silly notions come to mind,
your piercing eyes that held me like hot fiery coals"

Nicely said, this was an absolutely fantastic stanza! (: Great job.

~ Noodle. x

[Frieda P]

Offt, flip flops review Sye, thanks! x