~Dazzle'd

you are like opium, my drug of choice

       when you arouse me i've no control

weaving metaphoric poppies through my hair

    pulling tender tendrils to the fore

zephyrs of lively notes dancing on air

           playing whimsical flutterby melodies

whispering's from the ocean's depths

       ravaging heart strings 

in dark rhythmic heat

       as the wild beast that can't be tamed,

i get drunk on your elixir

       sweet tonic to soothe the spirits

the stirring vibrations,

         sweet love knots upon the breast

you dazzle my soul

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

truly beautiful...what imagery
i get drunk on your elixir-
reads of love and life
I admit I think of chasing the dragon when I read of opium- always wondered why they use that image with this
love that title and how you tied it in at the end
thank you fine lady

[Frieda P]

Ha different dragons, thanks Holly....

[icelandicblue]

A bedazzled soul- now that is a beautiful image. Nice tapestry of descriptions in this beautiful poem.

[Emily B]

we should all know this one in our lives, the one who draws passion on our eyelids

[Frieda P]

I saw this pop up on live feed, and it put a huge smile on my face :-D 'draws passion on our eyelids' that's poetry in itself.....!

[Emily B]

:) - :)

[Tai Ryens]

This is truly beautiful, 'tis all I can say. I oughta recite this to a lover one day; crediting you, of course!

[Frieda P]

You just made my day Tai!

[Pete Langley]

Sorry sweetheart...not one of your best, for me. I find this a little uncoordinated and hackneyed and really having no relation to the title until the last line - which makes it feel like an afterthought. Sorry love. P.

[Frieda P]

It' alright love, I only bled a little, they can't all be winners, chicken dinners I guess, thanks for your thoughts Pete, still love ya muchly!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"sweet love knots upon the breast"

nice image there...

as usual...bouncy, sensual, metaphorical and full of wonderful personification.

i like when a significant other does that to us...and that person is our drug of choice.

[Frieda P]

Me too jacob, unfortunately like a drug itself it usually wears off yet, we're still addicted.

[Kristin Lee]

you dazzle my soul...that is a beautiful phrase. I love how light and energetic this poem is. Fantastic word choices. I love how you string the phrases together. Love is like a drug isn't it? So euphoric. Very well done friend :)

[Frieda P]

Yes, sometimes and very addictive, thanks Kristin. :-)

[Astro]

Ravaged heart strings and love knots can only be cured by a full prescription of the motions of the ocean Frieda. Like they say, "take 2 and call me in the morning" ;) Nicely penned descriptive lines that should ignite passions in their reading.

[Frieda P]

Ha of course, always! Thanks Astro...you're bad. ;-)

[Astro]

Muhahahha devilishly so.

[Frieda P]

Lol I heard that from here!

[Astro]

:{ (fingers his moustache)

[Frieda P]

Like I said...bad. ;-P

[Astro]

ROTFL

[Frieda P]

xD

[kublakhan27]

Only you could make opium sound this desirable my dear...this one made me swoon a little...I would love to get my hands on that elixir recipe ;)

[Frieda P]

Wow, now I've made you swoon, that's a new one! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

;)

[spunkyleo]

great poem! i especially liked the very last line; "you dazzle my soul" i just love the word dazzle.

[Frieda P]

Thanks for dropping by spunkyleo, much appreciate your review, and me too....