This is such a beautifully constructed poem. Love the flow. You present your readers with some searching questions. I used to wrestle with these questions all the time.. so often I would drive myself insane from it. I finally resolved that death was a natural cycle of rebirth, and left it at that. Great job!
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Thanks Lori, somehow I missed your lovely review here.
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no worries, Frieda.. I think I miss some from time to time too =)
See, when it comes to death, there is a lot of questions. I know that just from watching and hearing about it that millions of us have questions but most cannot be answered. When someone dies it's really hard to deal with, 'specially if they were close to you. You got the image on the spot. An emotional read.
Death indeed is a real pain in the mind and across history great minds had incessantly pondered on it. Some frightened, some couldn't care less. And it simply amazes how something so ambiguous and mostly 'dark' can be fashioned beautifully by poetry. Thank you for sharing this.
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I don't ponder it so much, just in the forefront of my mind as I lost a good friend recently, thanks.. read moreI don't ponder it so much, just in the forefront of my mind as I lost a good friend recently, thanks for your visit and review, Day's Eye.
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Oh. My condolences. It's just I'm new here and I'm studying how to go about it. I had finally resolv.. read moreOh. My condolences. It's just I'm new here and I'm studying how to go about it. I had finally resolved that I have to share my ideas and I found this haven. And yes, I think you have a good command of the English vocabulary.
I don't know. I sad death in many places. I believe many kinds of death. I wish each of us know death with family near and love close. There are bad death. I wonder where the broken hearts and spirits go? A very good poem. Death is a great mystery. I believe on this earth. We can create heaven or hell? I told my family. Burn my remains and tossed them into Lake Superior. I will go back to nature once more. Thank you for the outstanding poetry.
Coyote
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I wonder too John, all questions I guess we'll have answered until the very end, if then. Thanks fo.. read moreI wonder too John, all questions I guess we'll have answered until the very end, if then. Thanks for your thoughts here.
What is death like? What is it like to die? A question which every one is inquisitive about, and everyone finds out the answer too. But the seeker can't feed other's curiosity for he is long gone before he may do so. The eager, the curious, has been so well expressed that it is mesmerizing! Nicely written! Good work :)
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Thank you Shivam, glad you enjoyed my little meanderings here. :-)
Excellent depth giving light do dark questions. If I may, this part,"is the feel of floating on zephyr's eternally blissful" is a bit confusing and could be written differently. The imagery of floating on a zephyr is beautiful and appropriate though. Also, the last line, " within pure grandness of the megacosm" could be changed slightly too. Megacosm to Macrocosm and adding the word 'the' before grandness would help the flow I think. These are only suggestions my dear and forgive me any slight, the poems good and quite enjoyable.
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Perhaps because you didn't read it as a question, I don't tend to use punctuation at times....I actu.. read morePerhaps because you didn't read it as a question, I don't tend to use punctuation at times....I actually did think of adding 'the' since I wasn't sure of the flow but then I thought it'd just be another filler word, I'm on the fence, you could be right, and no slight taken, always good to hear the suggestions of a talented poet.... thank you muchly Astro.
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You're very welcome, I'm glad you could still see my point of view without feeling bent out of shap.. read moreYou're very welcome, I'm glad you could still see my point of view without feeling bent out of shape. Some others might be to into themselves to even consider. If the first part I mentioned was a question, then I don't think you would need an apostrophe on Zephyr just an 's' though. :) (It did make better sense like a question though)
"we are but stardust" this was Deeply Beautiful Frieda Love the works of a wandering mind...or the wondering, wandering mind :)
So many belief systems in the world, and most carry common threads...this threaded silk was not common but Grand!!!
Pen excellence!!!
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Wow Soul, I'm dancing to your review, it's so glowing! Thanks so much...yes, stardust is a sweet th.. read moreWow Soul, I'm dancing to your review, it's so glowing! Thanks so much...yes, stardust is a sweet thought, no?
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Indeed Frieda...it most certainly is :) (Always deserving, I love Your fine works-even when no com.. read moreIndeed Frieda...it most certainly is :) (Always deserving, I love Your fine works-even when no comments,i'm reading 'em and enjoying:)
I bet it's all about how you die, the feeling you feel... And what comes after is life's greatest mystery... Poignant ... We all wander through these same thoughts... Lovely, dear Frieda.
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I lost a dear friend recently so I've been thinking on it, I guess you're right, each is different, .. read moreI lost a dear friend recently so I've been thinking on it, I guess you're right, each is different, thanks for the review Horizon.
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I'm so sorry to hear that Frieda! My condolences to you and those who loved your dear friend.
.. read moreI'm so sorry to hear that Frieda! My condolences to you and those who loved your dear friend.
HK
Strong imagery--and even stronger use of language.
The devil always "comes a knockin"; "knockin'" is his primary business; he is, after all, known as "The Accuser."
Brilliant work, Frieda!
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Thanks so much Frank, so glad you enjoyed this read.
I can appreciate the sentiment here....and I can appreciate your considerable vocabulary...but I would like to feel more flow from this. Sometimes when the words don't play together as nicely as they should, it can feel like you're using words just to use them - and I know that's not the case with you. Just keepin in reals, yo ;) I'm a party pooper like that.
CM.
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Ha, you can party poop on my thread anytime CM! Not sure what you mean exactly, if they're not play.. read moreHa, you can party poop on my thread anytime CM! Not sure what you mean exactly, if they're not playing together nicely, they're getting a time out. Thanks!
If you want to know me, read my poetry, it's all in there. I am a mother of three sons (my finest moments) a sister, a survivor and a little bit crazy. I lost my beloved sister to suicide, so you'll.. more..