Deliverance

Injustice, power & money,

Pound another nail in offenses box

crucifixion was not enough to suffice

dance on the souls of innocence

graves dug deep to hide reality

Almighty salacious verdant takes precedence

you can afford the fare but not the price you'll pay

time will tell the true licentiousness of your demeanor

ringing karma's doorbell with lamentations force

what goes round comes round in chargeable  time

bend over and let the devil see where you truly dwell

redemption's ransom more than checkbooks can afford

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You have branched into the darkness lately, my friend. I rather like this side of your writing, because it seems to ooze with such deep and honest emotion. I like the ideas and concepts of karma explored here, and the different possibilities and conclusions that this idea can convey.

you can afford the fare but not the price you'll pay
time will tell the true licentiousness of your demeanor -- these are some heavy lines...and full of truth.

[Frieda P]

Lost a very dear friend of mine in a tragic and senseless way, dark is where I dwell at the moment, thanks Friday.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Completely understand. A very good friend of mine lost her brother last night...I'm in a that strange, half-understanding, half not believing place right now...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i could hear the banjos..

great statement of the way things are today...and they have such a bleak outlook for future...

[Frieda P]

I can hear them now too, thanks jacob.

[FJ Davis]

Surprised no one mentioned the apparent reference to that stunning motion picture, "Deliverance." The "bend over" line bringing to mind the controversial move in that controversial movie.
Of course, your poem deals with a great deal more than a mere cinematic event.
Insightful, exceptional work, Frieda

[Frieda P]

Even more shocking that it never crossed my mind whilst writing, just thinking along the lines of revenge....yes, the bend over would be where they live. Thanks so much Frank.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The title reminds me of the movie of the same name which was about savage revenge. Maybe this is a poem in disguise a metaphor in itself for slights we have all been subject to? As always penned in dripping golden words and phrases.

[Frieda P]

So odd, I never thought of the movie until you mentioned it, my mind was too consumed with 'just deserts'....it speaks to so many injustices John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Let them go and live the life YOU deserve!

[Deuces]

Redemption's ransom is sure more than checkbooks can afford. What a powerful line and how true. What goes around does truly come around. A vivid, fierce piece of vengeance in the name of Karma. Beautiful job.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

you can afford the fare but not the price you'll pay

That line alone is quite powerful... some do not understand that they may get away with something in the beginning but it will always catch up with them. I love the hard hitting nature of this poem.

[kublakhan27]

One can practically feel the anger in 3D with this piece, an anger that is justified...again, there's little left to say here in light of what we've talked about, but it's a chore not to be cynical amongst humanity when there are so many bad examples of it around...and most of those bad examples don't even realize they're bad examples, which provides me with a kind of wry comic relief...you know how to deliver distinct emotions Mrs.R, and this is just the latest example of that...a good example of something in this case ;)

[gabrielle]

Indeed, we live in a insanely materialistic world. sometimes, i could not help but think that justice is but a theory. Very powerful piece!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Love this piece, very brilliant and powerful on its nature. Great write Frie as always!

[s y e]

This is a good powerful write, good structure, loved the way you set it out, it was simple yet powerful. Good job, another write well done. It is short but says a lot, something that is relatable to people. Nice.