~Heart Dance~

then this great void appeared,

          I fell reluctantly into it

after the storm

    there were no safe havens left

       just the quietude of nothingness

in that dark place appeared a light

        miniscule, like a candle flickering

bringing oxygen to this small place

           every second was imperceptible

albeit distinct, my thoughts subtle yet profound

         in the shadows there were signs

 the illumination bestowed copious truth

   I soaked it in with childlike radiant joy

jarring cacophony ceased, all that remained

         was the sweetness of melodious  music

              my heart sprung, floating light as a feather

                                         and it began to dance

                             

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

Your poem ebbs and flows with hope. What we are given, and how we accept or reject it, is so very often based on our perceptions of the moment. The beauty is we can change how we see things and revel in the joy that the light brings to us. I love your word choices in this and as always your imagery is gorgeously fraught with meaning.

[Frieda P]

Exactly blue, thanks for your insight, you always read me so well.

[Leigh]

There are many things that make hearts feel light and it is an amazing feeling that you have described so well. I enjoyed this poem very much

[Rhianne Ney]

Nice poem, love this

[Blue Ivory]

Ah the joy of heart dancing...weeeeeee! This reminded me of the poem "Daffodils" by William Wordsworth. When we were doing that poem in the 4th grade, our teacher explained to us that the poet's heart felt like dancing on seeing the site. And when he was explaining that to us, I was drawing dancing hearts next to the poem in my textbook -_-

Anyway, I do love the way you describe things! I could picture the whole thing. Your words always have this cool effect on me.

[Tarry Franck]

Love the feel and pace of this piece...it's quite lovely :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Tarry, glad you enjoyed this one. :-)

[TL Boehm]

Exquisite - to live in a moment with childlike wonder and without fear. that is a powerful place to be.

[Frieda P]

Ha, I do have moments, yes....thanks TL.

[David Scott]

This poem went a direction I did not anticipate. I like the last line best. When the heart is lifted it can fall like a rock or flit and float like a butterfly. Oh, to feel the heart, of its own accord, leap into the dance. Your breath follows shyly behind the thrilling spiral of bliss...
Wonderful.

[Frieda P]

I like the 'flit and float like a butterfly' David, always a dance in mind, thanks so much my friend.

[Emerald Seas]

The light shines from the smallest of beginnings. Beautifully written with poignant moments of propelling hope.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much for your insightful review, much appreciated Sera.

[Kristin Lee]

What a beautiful depiction of hope floating and also love being given life!

[Frieda P]

Glad you enjoyed this one Kristin!

[kublakhan27]

It reads like a dream, a bad one turned good...I don't know if these dreams are common to anyone else but mine have always been cut and dry...I have good dreams, bad dreams, and all-out nightmares haha I would love a dream like this, and this gives me hope for it ;P Another great piece, Sybil ;)

[Frieda P]

Lol @ the name! Funny man, you....wow, I don't think I ever had a dream or nightmare that was cut & dry, do you have to special order that kind? ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha I thought that would get a snicker from you ;) Consider yourself fortunate not to have those types of dreams...I would gladly sell you mine...actually I'd offer you a sample first just to give you an idea ;P

[Frieda P]

Not sure how that can be done but you're on Benji! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

If I figure it out you'll be the first to know ;)

[Frieda P]

Look to the cracks that's where the light shines through ;-)

[kublakhan27]

That I will do ;)

[Frieda P]

A little bird told me that ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha little bird, as in 5 foot 2? ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

"In that dark place appeared a light
miniscule, like a candle flickering
bringing oxygen to this small place..."

We take hope wherever we find it, if we are wise. Nicely done, Frieda!

[Frieda P]

Yes we do Rita, any port in a storm as they say...thanks so much!