A Sunder

My skin worn thin, my mind deluged

recesses of the heart cobwebbed with time

digging up past trespasses from the fold 

its vice grip like an implosion of the soul

'let no man put asunder' holds no meaning

where was god during the proceedings

Reviews

[Pete Langley]

In the depths of the damage of the ripping apart, the desire to call on a deity...any deity....to make us whole again is natural for a survivor like you, Frieda love. Ultimately, you have to find that `god` inside yourself to pull you out, don`t you? This moves me. P.

[Frieda P]

I will agree with you there Pete, sometimes these just sneak out without much resistance on my part, much appreciate your kind words here. x

[Rita L. Sev]

God does have a way of being elusive, doesn't he? In the harsh realities of Life, we seek his help from outside ourselves - only to find that, like poetry, he's within us. A gripping write, as always, Frieda.

[Marie]

Probably God was there, just not paying attention.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Think he was watching the rugby lol!

Nice as always, full of passion and bitterness; such perfect pathos.

[Frieda P]

OUCH John....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ouch?

[Frieda P]

Watching rugby, really?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes it's a thrilling game and gets all the tension out!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Besides you believe the fairy tale as much as I do

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not at all!

[Frieda P]

I still need someone to get mad at, he fits the bill....

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes I curse him and the devil when I am alone in the dark as I fear neither.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Such simplicity and yet such depth. "The recesses of the heart cobwebbed with time"--so very true and striking. Love that line. You never disappoint, though I feel sometimes as if I can't leave as much feedback as i would like to because there is nothing to critique!

[Frieda P]

Ha well I'm not going to squawk about that, thanks so much Friday, you made my day!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Always a question to ask... what God gave us was freewill and unfortunately some men take advantage of it.

[Frieda P]

Exactly! Thanks Dale.

[Sami Khalil]

"'let no man put asunder' holds no meaning"
What a wise lady and a powerful line . I never thought that was logical at all but I agree with you ...A very good write with deep meanings...:)

[Frieda P]

Ha, see right? I'm glad you agree or I'd have to haunt you Sami. ;-) Just saying, what I meant to say was thanks kindly!

[Sami Khalil]

I know. The ever feared and talented... Kidding on the first one...:)

[Frieda P]

LOL!!! ;-P

[Sami Khalil]

;)

[Frieda P]

You're so lucky you don't live in joisey ha ;-)

[Sami Khalil]

So true. ...lol

[Frieda P]

xD

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)

[Stella Armour]

very deep thoughts here Frieda, God must have had a reason...

[Frieda P]

Hmm, me & the big guy don't see eye to eye on that one, thanks for your thoughts here Stella.

[Holly Mason]

digging up past trespasses...will make a deluded mind explode through it's thin skin*)
you are amazing writer lady
love how you end it with an open thought...
thank you for sharing fine lady

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks Holly, you're amazing, love this review, thanks so much!

[Jack...]

Sometimes what we seek can not be found unless we open up and let it wander in. It will come with no bright lights and glitter, but opening your heart and mind will be the invitation and I truly believe that one will be excited by the party when the guest of honor arrives. Nice Freida, but sad.

[Frieda P]

What, no glitter? I hope you're right Jack, I tend to turn down invitations as you know...thanks so much for your kind review.

[ChemicalMadness]

And she ends the bout with an uppercut to the jaw! Knockout!!!!

This was the very definition of poignant. It's not easy to pack meaning, feeling, honesty and beauty into 5 short lines....but that's exactly what you've done here.

CM.

[Frieda P]

Ha, that's exactly what it feels like some days except I'm the one down for the count, thanks so much for this glowing review CM.