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Ecstasy Hiccups of Poetic Madness

Ecstasy Hiccups of Poetic Madness

A Poem by Frieda P
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Poetic madness written in collaboration by kublakhan, the illustrious master of abstract (Steve) & Frieda, enjoy!

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you applied pressure, i acquiesced
heated elements drove me home
implosions bit my tongue to bid you 
another invitation into my boudoir
your reply; fingers grabbed roughly
and pulled through my tousled hair

satin tresses exercised
sweet strangulation on your 
slow deliberate grip
hinting at acceleration
smothered at the source
so my skin could observe
the methods of your touch
and my mind could formulate
the level of anticipation 
in your texture

found rapture in your fluidity
wrapping taut thighs around your release
chanting in rapid succession of the gods
unchained melodies of dark moons

conveyor ecstasy hiccups
in time with every grizzled jolt
jutting both bodies slanted
into air slapped teasingly
with tiny beads of sweat
and stray saliva

small of back tickled in time
with full-frontal grope
firm but loose enough
to field the ebb and flow
of mounds in motion
wanton abandon sheathed of your stroke
poetic sweet surrender, in your rush of madness

© 2013 Frieda P


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There are some very good lines in here. I liked the last two stanza's especially but I would say there are some words that could be looked at to improve.
"conveyor ecstasy hiccups" - interesting here, tweak it and it should work as a first line.

but there are some very good lines like
"found rapture in your fluidity"

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks, appreciate the comments George...I think Steve likes that line the way it is, but much appre.. read more



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I sense there is a deep meaning to this. I probably have to refresh my vocabs though, very confusing. The flow, however, I can commend. It just seem right! Brava to you and Mr. Steve!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Deeper meaning, as in kenetics, ha...it just flowed easily once we got started, thanks Monster!
Great and sensual piece in its glory peak. (: Nicely written poem

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thanks Rhianne, it was fun working with Steve on this one. :-)
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thanks as well from me Rhianne :)
Rhianne Ney

11 Years Ago

yeah< welcome
Oh, now this is not only good, it is perfect! :) Beautiful work, a favourite hon! Great collab xoxo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Woo, did you hear that Steve, we got a 'perfect' from Poppy Silver, doing the happy dance! Thanks mu.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

It's definitely happy-dance worthy ;P Thank you Poppy, you humble us with your praise :)
Ruth

11 Years Ago

Most welcome! :)
Oh, my! I am blushing! A sensual, flowing piece that makes me wish my husband was home right now! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha that's my line Frieda ;)
Rita L. Sev

11 Years Ago

What makes you think I'm quiet? ;)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

I stand corrected ;-)
Ok, now that my glasses are no longer fogged...nice job you two, this had a reckless abandon running through it as if someone's hair was on fire. Down and dirty, but smooth and very well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Down & dirty but smooth, hmmm...sounds like a smooth operator, thanks Jack.
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha don't worry Jack, I had foggy glasses at some points too...I had to write some of it after all .. read more
Get a room you two! Not in front of the kids PLeeease!!

Nice erotic write!

May need a mature label?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

I was thinking that too John, Steve said no...now you've got me perplexed. What say you Benji?
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

I didn't think it was going to be needed, but since it has been explicitly referred to by a reader, .. read more
Mmm that is so sexy groping is so much fun :) This was a very hot piece, which I also found very hilarious the way you described certain things

like "chanting in rapid succession of the gods"

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha and I thought the flying sweat was the predominant image in there...just don't equate flying sp.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Oh my word, you're drooling too, you're a hot mess!
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

LOL Well you're definitely half-right at least ;P
Beautiful ease into the nature of feeling and continuing onward into full rapture---exquisite write!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Thank you, it was smooth sailing writing with the great abstract poet, much appreciate the visit and.. read more
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, and Mrs. R as well for continuing to humble me with her praise even though I co.. read more
Holy crap...I'm at work and I almost passed out reading this. Should have had a big warning sign... danger ahead! Lmao...what a mind blowing experience on those words!! Going to lay down now and sigh... ;-D xoxo...

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Ha by quiet ones, I know you weren't tawkin bout moi, ha ;-P
kublakhan27

11 Years Ago

Haha nope, no question about that ;P
redflutterby

11 Years Ago

Lmao.... Frieda is never quiet!!! ;-p

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