Ecstasy Hiccups of Poetic Madness

Poetic madness written in collaboration by kublakhan, the illustrious master of abstract (Steve) & Frieda, enjoy!

you applied pressure, i acquiesced
heated elements drove me home
implosions bit my tongue to bid you 
another invitation into my boudoir
your reply; fingers grabbed roughly
and pulled through my tousled hair

satin tresses exercised
sweet strangulation on your 
slow deliberate grip
hinting at acceleration
smothered at the source
so my skin could observe
the methods of your touch
and my mind could formulate
the level of anticipation 
in your texture

found rapture in your fluidity
wrapping taut thighs around your release
chanting in rapid succession of the gods
unchained melodies of dark moons

conveyor ecstasy hiccups
in time with every grizzled jolt
jutting both bodies slanted
into air slapped teasingly
with tiny beads of sweat
and stray saliva

small of back tickled in time
with full-frontal grope
firm but loose enough
to field the ebb and flow
of mounds in motion

wanton abandon sheathed of your stroke

poetic sweet surrender, in your rush of madness

Reviews

[Todd Mc' Callough]

There are some very good lines in here. I liked the last two stanza's especially but I would say there are some words that could be looked at to improve.
"conveyor ecstasy hiccups" - interesting here, tweak it and it should work as a first line.

but there are some very good lines like
"found rapture in your fluidity"

[Frieda P]

Thanks, appreciate the comments George...I think Steve likes that line the way it is, but much appreciated....

[Coyote Poetry]

You are amazing my friend. I like the movement of thoughts and words. I had to read again. There is madness in writing. To put your ideas down and hope to create thoughts and action. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Frieda P]

You are too kind Coyote, much appreciate your kind review.

[Tai Ryens]

How do I start with even the slightest comment? Delicious; through and through..

[Frieda P]

Haha I think you said a mouthful right there Tai, thanks so much.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

I don't know about anyone else but I actually bit my tongue while reading this! A most telling piece, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Ha in a good way I hope...thanks!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Of Course!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

is this about sex...:)

passionate write...so much feeling physically and emotionally...

but also there is something sensual about being with the muse...it is a tryst so to speak.

[Frieda P]

Silly man ;-)

[Chris]

You two should charge admission...

oh wait - you did.

[kublakhan27]

Haha thank you Chris

[Frieda P]

Ha, sounds like a plan!

[Pranav Malhotra]

bravo ....

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Pranav :)

[Rob Santana]

Stray saliva I like that.

[Frieda P]

Ha, why doesn't that surprise me Rob?! Thanks...x

[Rob Santana]

Stray saliva is the new gooey goodness!!!

[Frieda P]

Bhahahaha!

[KAOlmsted]

O.O I just watched Frieda and Steve get it on...holy cats..."stray saliva"??? Ew...which one of you is responsible for the stray saliva! Clean that up now!

Holy cats. This is awesomeness all wrapped up in edible underwear...great stuff guys.

[Frieda P]

Oh Steve....come answer to the kimmer, will ya? ;-)

You know me better, I'm not that messy hun ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Ha! I knew it was him ;-)

[Frieda P]

Don't tell him I said so, but the kid is messy. ;-) *laugh* xo

[kublakhan27]

LOL Wow, I can't even hide in a collab ;P Well I hope I'm not actually that messy, or maybe I do...that's a thinker, but I'm not, well, informed enough to give a concrete answer ;) I'd say this is one is fairly tame compared to the first collab though, but I don't know if total tameness is part of our poetic make-up ;P

[Frieda P]

Let's face it vanilla is boring...ha, and NO, you can't hide Benji! ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

Well, at least Rob liked it...that should make you feel better, Steve ;-) And I just got the most INAPPROPRIATE visual right then xD xD xD

[kublakhan27]

Ah is it really that boring? You've already gotten a peak into his imagination...surely it's not so boring in there ;) It's funny how a guy as introverted as myself in real life can be so conspicuous in the written word...oh well, that's me ;P At least I'm not thinking inappropriate thoughts...at least not right now...actually, I might as well just take that back haha :P

[Frieda P]

You're far from vanilla my dear, I assure you. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Only on paper Mrs. R, only on paper ;P

[Frieda P]

Obviously I can only judge that tiny part that you pen, but you've got it going on inside, it's what makes you tick...so wrong again, ha, you know I'm always right, hey, I'm a woman, remember? ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha yes you are a woman, and it takes a woman to dissect my imagination with the precision you do, after they've known me for a while that is...that goes for you too Kimmer, if you're reading this ;P There's a lot going on inside, no doubt about that, in fact, I've got a backlog of mental images and there appears to be no sign of it letting up any time soon...good thing you're here to keep me (ahem) focused Mrs. R ;P

[Frieda P]

Is that what you're calling it? ha

[KAOlmsted]

Mrs. R...holy cats, as in Robinson? Goo goo g'joob :-p

I'm right there with you, Steve...

[Frieda P]

Ha you're too smart for your own good the kimmer! ;-)

[KAOlmsted]

Not the first time I've heard that ;-)

[Frieda P]

Ha the hard reality Einstein had to deal with too no doubt. ;-P

[KAOlmsted]

:-p Stop distracting me! *laugh* I should just log out...the temptation is just too great...

[Frieda P]

Mwah! ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Geez I can't leave you ladies alone for a few minutes let alone an hour ;P

Frieda: Yes, that's what I'm calling it ;P Kimmer: Yes, that's what I call her...I knew it would only be a matter of time before someone noticed ;)

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[Frieda P]

Can't get away shyte around this place!

[Pete Langley]

Is this what they call cyber-sex?.....no, really, I want to know! Is this what all the computer- bound dirty mackintoshes get off on ? ....`cos if it ain`t it ought to be! Nice one, my lovely friends. I`m sure you enjoyed the romp! P.

[Frieda P]

Oh Pete this is hysterical, you actually had me laughing out loud...it's called a poetic 'collaboration', ever heard? *laughing* I can't help where your dirty mac went! ;-)

[Pete Langley]

Oh is THAT what you call it these days.....poetic collaboration....hahahaha. Never had a mac....and the tou-tou is pretty threadbare. :)

[Frieda P]

Consider this a squishy hug Pete, gotta love you! ;-) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's okay Pete, I can assure you wholeheartedly that the connection is purely literary, we just have racy little minds that come together from time to time :P

[Pete Langley]

Hahaha I hear what you say, Steve, I hear what you say. HAHAHAHA

[kublakhan27]

LOL I don't doubt it my friend :P