~Twice Forsaken

I often wonder what my sisters last thoughts were...

I pleaded for God to rescue me

my face gleaned the precipice

the eternal abyss so enticing

a leap of faith to peace

seemingly no other answers

i spoke to the trees in desperation

they barely rustled, gave me no sign

lifted my arms to the sky in despair

forsaken by yet another father

life, devoid of promise

i breathe one last breath,

descent not a far fall,

            took the plunge

                & floated on a soft zephyr

Author's Note

Reviews

[Jack...]

You really do know how to squeeze the hell someone's heart and pull dire emotions straight from their gut. I just got back to my office, while I was out I was listening to "November Rain" by G&R, (One of my favorite songs) I had the stereo cranked full and was feeling great and then...I returned and I read this and I realized I have no right feeling so good when others feel so bad inside. Truly Frieda, I loved this and hated it. It is beautiful, the thoughts are beuatiful and the words are beautiful, the circumstance that prompted you to write it is not. You still amaze me, that is the sign of a great poet, to have the ability to affect people and make them think. I can assure you, your words alter my world.

[Frieda P]

Very touching sentiment Jack, thanks so much, I do appreciate you my friend.

[Pete Langley]

I wonder how you live with this and are able to articulate it starkly....but live you must, and your star must shine all the more brightly in tribute to your love, Frieda, because love is the only way from beneath the cloud. You are strong and brave and loved. P.

[JoJo Hallows]

I love when people really delve into the raw core of their expression. This is so pure and honest, a wonderfully illustrated moment. Thank you.

[TL Boehm]

beautiful. and with a raw ache at the same time.

[kublakhan27]

This was a tough one to read, I can only imagine how tough it was to write...this just kills my heart...I'm not even sure what else to say, I'm speechless...

[Frieda P]

Thanks my dear friend, yes it was, some days it just weighs so heavily on my mind, I had to purge it. xo

[kublakhan27]

xoxo

[Tai Ryens]

Short of a breath you nearly end yourself, only to be rescued shy of a second. I could feel your sorrow, how it all affects you. Yet you know your time isn't finished, I could hear it with that last line. Well done.

[Frieda P]

Always appreciate your insight Tai, much appreciated.

[Corset]

It's like sleeping without dreams, one second you are and then the next you are not, and you don't realize you are not unless you wake up, at least it was that way for me,
so I no longer fear death just the getting to it part.

[Frieda P]

Huh? I no longer fear death either, it's the living that's truly the scary part.

[Corset]

yep

[Emerald Seas]

Hits the mind and heart hard. Such tough thoughts to ponder and twist over and over. No answer will ever be received on what was really going through her mind, but you brought the feelings to the surface with your wonderful writing style that never disappoints.

[Frieda P]

I'm sure there are no answers, not satisfactory ones anyway, but still can't help that the mind drifts there, thanks so much Sera.

[lolawants]

wow very sad :(

[Frieda P]

Thank you lola.

[Rhianne Ney]

This is full of emotions, though unspoken one but you were able to lay all the proper elements in here and that's enough for me to say that this is a great poem. (:

[Frieda P]

Thanks for you thoughts Rhianne, much appreciated.

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is quite intense...there is sorrow, but then a softness at the end. I like the way that the title plays into the piece...forsaken twice. Sometimes we get to this point, where we feel completely alone and broken, ready to fall, and then in the falling we find a softness that we didn't realize existed. Well done, my friend.

[Frieda P]

One can only hope she felt that softness at the end, I hope that to be true, thanks so much Friday.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I think it is...I shall keep the thought